In the memo from the vice president state that when they use Fly-Away Pest Control Company for pest control service, they found that over $20000 worth of food had been destroyed by pest damage in Palm city while using service from Buzzoff Pest Control Company in Wintervale only $10000 worth of food damaged by pest. So, they are deciding to favor Wintervale over Fly-Away Pest control Company. So, here the company makes some hasty conclusion based on some unwarranted assumption.
Firstly, the author compares two different cities warehouse. But, the author did not provide any information about the weather of those cities. There is a chance that the weather of two cities in that month was not the same. For Palm City, it might be a rainy season which is great for grow and engender pest, meanwhile, in Wintervale it was winter and pests are not active in this season.
Secondly, the author vaguely state about two company, there is a good possibility that Buzzoff charges a lot for their service. In that case, the author’s conclusion would be wrong. The author also did not mention the condition of the warehouses in two different cities. We don’t know whether bad conditions of those two warehouses makes the difference or not. It the condition of the warehouse in Palm City is worse than the warehouse in Wintervale, then it is possible that it is not possible to blame Fly-Away.
Thirdly, the author provided information based only a month while it should be based on annually. After a year, Fly-Away might work well for restoring the warehouse.
In conclution the author vaguely stating this conclusion. Without proper information, it is possible that the explanations stated above might be true.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1382 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.424 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.335 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 287.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98954703833 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61222744595 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515679442509 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.2047983719 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269969687053 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668080159786 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877954889214 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114120972183 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119553511232 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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