The memo has mentioned, in order to reverse the decline in the number of listeners of the radio station, the type of music that broadcasting should be changed. Although the reasons provided by the author looks persuasive at the first glance, when we delve deeper into his reasoning we could find holes and prepositions without supporting information. He assumed, there is a direct relation between the type of music and the number of listeners but he fails to provide adequate evidence to prove it. I could not accept this memo as it is due to three reasons and I will explain them now.
First of all, the writer has alleged that the number of listeners in general increased but he did not address any survey or additional information to support it. The base of his memo is on this assumption and if it is not correct, whole of the memo and his reasoning fall apart. If this is the case, it may the total number of listeners decreased and this station also lose some listeners and it is not due to the type of music or any other fault of the radio station.
Moreover, the author believe retirement do not like rock-music and because the number of retirement increased in this area consequently the number of this radio station decreased. In order to prove this premise, the writer should provide some data and information from scientific research that shows aforementioned conclusion. However, the author did not mention any.
In addition, the writer concludes that there is limited interest in music because the amount of recorded music sales declined. There may some other possibilities for this decline that may be unrelated to the subject of this memo. It could be a result of the advancement of technology. If this is the case, people may prefer to download their favorite music instead of buying form stores. Thus, the reason that provided by the author could not hold true for all possibilities and the author should provide additional information to remove other possibilities.
In conclusion, in order to make the memo more cogent and persuasive for readers, the author should provide additional information and remove other possibilities by conducting research or comprehensive investigations.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97297297297 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83840406192 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448648648649 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5115965518 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132862970741 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048094980096 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597637747945 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766836371958 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463747544926 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97297297297 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83840406192 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448648648649 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5115965518 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132862970741 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048094980096 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597637747945 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766836371958 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463747544926 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.