The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station."To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth i

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The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station.

"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."

The author's assumption is that the declination of listeners to WWAC radio station can be resolved by changing thier current rock music pattern .However, is this decision of changing format of music is made by any survey conductance or statistical data pattern or by other means is not mentioned in the extract.Hence the argument is flawed by several reasons and thus not strong enough to lead to the claim in the given argument.

For example,the extract says that the number of listener's have reduced due to population growth of

retirement people however ,by what number is the retirement increased or decreased, in how many years or time period is there migration ? is not mentioned in memorandum.Hence even if assuming this data is collected by using certain survey , the survey is done to how many is not cleared.Maybe, survey of few people has led to the decision of changing the radio station's music taste or maybe survey of many but few responses.

Another claim in memorandum tells of switching the format of music according to the users.As of here,according to retiring people. However this change definately not bring an inclination to WWAC is indirectly assumed because of local sales reduction or reluctance towards music. Sales of how many percent , or in terms of number nowhere taken into account.Is there any other popular radio station ? which is servicing better music to customers , IS only a WWAC facing through this situation ,if not then switching to news and talk format is viable but again the question comes up will this guaranteed bring WWAC a rise again, Again this is not clearly state or proved. maybe , good practice in their relevant area but good to this station is erratic .

Every comapany or a system tries to reach zenith this requires constant update or look over of content so to meet the ends of customers.THis is approachable by irrefutable past marks of patterns of various fields taken into account. Although the manager of WWAC has found the alternative to his problem statement of falling of radio users by approching to the viewpoints of local people in his area of news and talk format but the success rate after implementing is unpredicaable or not considered .Hence paucity of reseach maybe or some analysis weaken's the argument of manager and is not likely significant to persuade.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02570694087 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83508718832 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.736669627 57.8364921388 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.5 119.503703932 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.9 23.324526521 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.25449101796 875% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196675429772 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698539501757 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500758062641 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103891951205 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534847347384 0.0628817314937 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 14.3799401198 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 48.3550499002 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.32208582834 118% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1905 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.798 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 49.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.549 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.768 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.036 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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