The owner of Armchair Video argues that in order to improve profits, it should reduce operating expenses at all stores of organization. The author’s main conclusion based on an assumption that when last month Marston reduced its hours by declining three hours from before and reduced its inventory by no longer stocking any film released more than two years ago. Because of very few complaints received, the owner recommends that we should support such policies at all other Armchair Video, as it play vital role in improving profits. This argument has many unanswered questions, hence it leads to dubiousness. Moreover, this argument has lack of support evidences. It has several flaws in it.
Firstly, the author in the argument assumes as “because of this, after this, therefore” fallacy to draw the conclusion of this argument. Moreover, the author assumes that one thing or strategy applicable and appropriate to one city store will necessarily applicable to other stores. This argument assumes that when Marston store reduced its hours by three hours than before, very few complaints were registered. The author fails to depict and prove relationship between other stores and Marston stores. Moreover, there is not any statistical data of customers who visited the store and how many of them filed their complaints. This premise has lack of evidences.
Furthermore, the author’s fails to prove that raising prices is not a good option to improve profits. It may be a case that raising prices of Armchair Video product is a best way to improve its profits rather than reducing operating hours.
Moreover, the author in this argument make an assumption that after reducing number of operating hours, very few complaints were registered by customers. But, is it necessary that profits were increase ? There is not any relationship mention by the author that reduce in complaints play vital role in improving profits. The author can strengthen his position in this argument by catering relationship between decline in customers complaints and enhancement in profits.
In conclusion, this argument has many unanswered questions and lack of supporting evidences, hence it leads to dubiousness. Moreover, the author in this argument assumes wrong analogy “because of this, therefore, after this” to draw the conclusion of the argument. In addition, it is supposed that in trait applicable and effective to one city store is relevant to other city stores, too. Since the owner fails to prove relationship between improvement in profits and decline in customer’s complaints, the argument seems utterly baseless. To make it compelling and cogent, the author should include all such possibilities ans conditions.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2223 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.182 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.652 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.34 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The owner of Armchair Video argues that in order to i...
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Line 6, column 174, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ing prices of Armchair Video product is a best way to improve its profits rather ...
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Line 8, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t any relationship mention by the author that reduce in complaints play vital rol...
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Line 10, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... effective to one city store is relevant to other city stores, too. Since the own...
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Line 10, column 625, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'possibilities'' or 'possibility's'?
Suggestion: possibilities'; possibility's
...ent, the author should include all such possibilities ans conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, may, moreover, then, therefore, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42424242424 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96891138797 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44289044289 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4448775869 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.173913043 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.652173913 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30434782609 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138024931125 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450472283505 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468901565622 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975695813917 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382206910145 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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