The argument claims that Olympic Foods will be able to minimize their costs and maximize profits because in color film processing the cost of print fell in the fullness of time. Furthermore it can be related with the principle applies to the processing of food and with others industries. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing, and has several flaws.
First of all, the author makes an allegation when correlates two different business from the one hand film processing on the other hand food processing. However, it can not be denied that costs of food processing don’t involve the same components which apply in film processing. For instance, it is known that frozen products require special equipments, proper storage and logistic transportation in order to keep them fresh. These components can require significant costs and there are probability that these products may not to pay off. In comparison with film industry, where costs on movie production are formed in another way. The argument could have been much clearer if the author had analyzed this two sphere more deeply.
Secondly, the author states that due to long experience of the company there is expectation of minimize costs and maximize profits. Nevertheless, it is not explained how knowledge and background of company relate with such factors as costs and profits. Factors such as demand on products, the general situation on frozen food market and prices of food should also be taken in consideration. It must not forget that there are other players on this market which can set prices more loyal for buyers and Olympic Foods will not be pursued despite their long stay on this business. If the argument had provided more detail analysis of frozen food market then it would have been a lot more convincing.
Finally, the memo doesn’t explain which methods use management of Olympic Food to cut costs and increase profit at present days. What if management and employees of company work inefficient and it more influences on company than other reasons.
In conclusion, the argument is weak because of above mentioned reasons and is therefore flawed. It could be considerably strengthened if author mentioned all of the relevant facts. In order to estimate the validity of an argument it is essential to have full knowledge of all the contributing factors. Without this information, the argument is un-substantiated and open to debate.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.716 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.695 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.297 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... of print fell in the fullness of time. Furthermore it can be related with the principle ap...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 524, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...here are probability that these products may not to pay off. In comparison with ...
^^
Line 2, column 550, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...these products may not to pay off. In comparison with film industry, where costs on movi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...spite their long stay on this business. If the argument had provided more detail a...
^^
Line 4, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... memo doesn't explain which methods use management of Olympic Food to cut co...
^^
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd employees of company work inefficient and it more influences on company than o...
^^
Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...erably strengthened if author mentioned all of the relevant facts. In order to estimate th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17721518987 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82787869843 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513924050633 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1436099343 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.25 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0943665333136 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292473339987 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375833758931 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0575135095813 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309553632056 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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