According to the article, the author believes that a business ought to only hire people who sleep less than 6 hours per night in order to success. Based on a recent study focused on the relationship between sleeping hours and success in business, the argument is very weak because some assumptions made are not reliable.
Assuming that the study focused on advertising companies’ executives is convincing, the author argues that the association between the success of business and the average sleeping hours per night is cogent. However, the study has only rated 300 workers. The sample size is too small to lead to a reliable conclusion. Maybe the connection between sleeping hours and higher profit is just a coincidence. In addition, maybe the executives had lied in the research because they didn’t want to be seen as lazy. We don’t know the way used in the research to assess the sleeping hours, so the average number of sleeping hours maybe unreliable as well. If the study itself is not cogent, the result is likely to be flawed.
Even if the study is reliable, it is not wise to assume that other kinds of businesses would be the same as the advertising industry. The executives rated are all in the advertising industry. As we know, people working in advertisement face the problem of heavy working tasks. Maybe workers in advertising industry need to sleep less and work longer, while others don’t need to. In some kinds of business, people may need to sleep more to keep careful. Thus, It is not reasonable to apply the result to all kinds of businesses.
In addition, if it is true that the connection between less sleeping hours and higher profit play an important role in all business, it would still be difficult for companies to only hire people who sleep less than 6 hours per night. In the argument, the author assume that it is feasible to take such an action in choosing workers. But actually it is quite difficult to do that, because the candidates may lie to obtain the job opportunities. It is also difficult for companies to assess the sleeping hours per night needed by workers as well. Thus, the assumption about the feasibility is not reliable.
In conclusion, the argument is not very strong unless these assumptions mentioned above are reasonable. We still need more information about the reliability of the study, the relationship in other industries and the feasibility of measurements to assess the argument.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 1976 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.716 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.16 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'lain'.
Suggestion: lain
.... In addition, maybe the executives had lied in the research because they didn’t wan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91586538462 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76775196726 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6689143411 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9545454545 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261865681965 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739322958809 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708802669362 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137674296259 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861527839224 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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