The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In all businesses it is important to consider the importance of the roles of executives for the success of the team. Therefore, it is an interesting piece of article. However, coming up with such an exact argument would require more than just the results of a single study. Here we can say that there are some assumptions either made or emitted, such as, the accuracy of the data, conditions of the different companies, the performance of rest of the team, possibility of applying same approach to all the work fields, etc.
To start we can always question the accuracy of the data. How reliable is the data provided by asking to the individuals? Because of various reasons the answers given might not represent the true amount of the sleep they are taking. An example for this type of behaviour can be trying to manipulate people about how hard working they are.
Another assumption here is that all the companies had same level of background and strength. We don’t have an information if the companies are in the same league in the first place. If they are, we don’t have the information about the rest of the teams beside the executives. Such that if some companies are originally prone to growth because of the background of the business or have better work force it would not necessarily mean that sleeping hours of the executives matter too much.
One more thing is that the tiredness levels and the working hours of the different business fields are very likely to differ as well. Therefore, it would not be true to approach based on the same data to all fields. A construction manager and a social media manager has completely different work conditions.
In conclusion, we can say that it is important to pick the right people for the management positions, however the standard applied here cannot be just the sleeping hours of the candidates. Because, there are too many other factors that is needed to be considered in a company’s success. So that, the argument based on the study shown above has too many assumptions that would not hold true most likely and cannot be trusted.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1688 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.625 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.561 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...same approach to all the work fields etc To start we can always question the accu...
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...e people about how hard working they are Another assumption here is that all the ...
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...ame level of background and strength We dont have an information if the companies ar...
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...eague in the first place If they are we dont have the information about the rest of ...
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...has completely different work conditions In conclusion we can say that it is impo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67217630854 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5654823704 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451790633609 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 363.0 22.8473053892 1589% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1696.0 119.503703932 1419% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 363.0 23.324526521 1556% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 90.0 5.70786347227 1577% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127287565833 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127287565833 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720257742443 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298716307036 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 182.1 14.3799401198 1266% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -288.51 48.3550499002 -597% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 143.7 12.197005988 1178% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.29 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.25 8.32208582834 291% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 147.2 11.1389221557 1321% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 11.9071856287 479% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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