The following appeared as part of an article in a popular science magazine Scientists must typically work 60 to 80 hours a week if they hope to further their careers consequently good and affordable all day child care must be made available to both male a

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The following appeared as part of an article in a popular science magazine.
Scientists must typically work 60 to 80 hours a week if they hope to further their careers; consequently, good and affordable all day child care must be made available to both male and female scientists if they are to advance in their fields. Moreover, requirements for career advancement must be made more flexible so that preschool-age children can spend a significant portion of each day with a parent."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.

It is true that scientists have to work hard to further their careers since it takes an enormous amount of time and patience for any new finding or invention for example. Newton had to work day and night before he was able to reshape modern physics. Modern scientists also have to work for long hours to further advance their theories and science which in turn proves to be pivotal for their careers. Inventions were not made in a night, but required hours of input and sometimes years to complete.

The article suggests that scientists must typically work 60 to 80 hours a week to enhance their careers and supports the argument with an assumption that good and affordable child care must be made available to both male and female scientists if they are to advance in their fields. The assumption highlights the part that good and affordable child care is essential for any scientists aiming to endure their career. A good and affordable child care ensures a healthy and beneficial environment for the child to learn and grow. This would also result in a proper and appropriate uprising for the child which could be fruitful in shaping future his future.

The article substantiates a conclusion stating career advancement must be made more flexible so that preschool-age children can spend a significant portion of each day with a parent is plausible to certain extent. It is true that children are the future of the country. The younger generation plays an important role in shaping the countries future as they are the asset for any country. Giving right education from the beginning not just academically but socially as well is very significant. The conclusion drawn by the article if valid could undermine the fact that academic scholars are the ones that take any country towards advancement. Having flexible schedule so that a child is able to send more time with his parents would aid his social development to a certain extent but would not help him academically. School is were children develop their academics and social development.

In conclusion, the article fails to substantiate the conclusion drawn with plausible statistics and claims.

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Average: 3.4 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'where'?
Suggestion: where
...ld not help him academically. School is were children develop their academics and so...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their academics and social development. In conclusion, the article fails to subs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01666666667 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7334462488 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1191890361 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.875 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355436000012 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100978516993 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134397953462 0.0701772020484 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188301173325 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162599695983 0.0628817314937 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1774 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.675 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.572 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5