An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The statement stating that an ailing patient should have an access to his or her doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients which could further determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition can be agreed upon to a certain extent. Any patient suffering from an ailment severe or moderate requires a very sophisticated line of treatment. It is the doctors duty and expertise to treat the patient and cure him or her from any such ailment. The ability to cure patients effectively is what ultimately defines the doctors efficacy in treating patients. However, how is one able to analyze this without having the knowledge of the doctor's success rate or experience.
Many times, people refer to doctor as the saviour of life because of their ability to treat patients expertly and cure them from any severe ailments. But at the same time the patient should have an access to doctor's record of treating similar afflicted patients that would give a better understanding of the doctor's competence in treating that medical condition. For example, if a doctor widely known for his expertise to treat heart patients would not be a problem for a patient having a heart related ailment. An access to the doctor's record of treating heart patients for any individual would be essential in determining the doctor's ability to aid such patients. This would give the patient required knowledge and judgement to get an insight about the doctor's history.
Every individual should have an access to the doctor's history since this would ensure whether the doctor is able to aid the ailment or not. If doctor is globally acknowledged for his treatment then getting an access to his history would become easier. Ailments like cancer, which could be fatal at times require expert and efficient treatment. During such cases the doctors ability to handle such ailments is very important.
In conclusion, any patient should have an access to the doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients as this would give a better understanding of the doctor's competence in treating that medical condition. Every individual should demand access of historical data giving an insight into the doctor's history.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ting that an ailing patient should have an access to his or her doctors record of treatin...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...histicated line of treatment. It is the doctors duty and expertise to treat the patient...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 551, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ectively is what ultimately defines the doctors efficacy in treating patients. However,...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...his without having the knowledge of the doctors success rate or experience. Many tim...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...t the same time the patient should have an access to doctors record of treating similar a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ould give a better understanding of the doctors competence in treating that medical con...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: Access
...patient having a heart related ailment. An access to the doctors record of treating heart...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...l would be essential in determining the doctors ability to aid such patients. This woul...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...d judgement to get an insight about the doctors history. Every individual should hav...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...istory. Every individual should have an access to the doctors history since this would...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...individual should have an access to the doctors history since this would ensure whether...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...owledged for his treatment then getting an access to his history would become easier. Ail...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...icient treatment. During such cases the doctors ability to handle such ailments is very...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
... In conclusion, any patient should have an access to the doctors record of treating simil...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ould give a better understanding of the doctors competence in treating that medical con...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...torical data giving an insight into the doctors history.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, similarly, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1546961326 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63143551233 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414364640884 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2957113217 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.625 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.567394980382 0.243740707755 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.229028387869 0.0831039109588 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174020880839 0.0758088955206 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413823028266 0.150359130593 275% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12489044984 0.0667264976115 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ting that an ailing patient should have an access to his or her doctors record of treatin...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...histicated line of treatment. It is the doctors duty and expertise to treat the patient...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 551, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ectively is what ultimately defines the doctors efficacy in treating patients. However,...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...his without having the knowledge of the doctors success rate or experience. Many tim...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...t the same time the patient should have an access to doctors record of treating similar a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ould give a better understanding of the doctors competence in treating that medical con...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: Access
...patient having a heart related ailment. An access to the doctors record of treating heart...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...l would be essential in determining the doctors ability to aid such patients. This woul...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...d judgement to get an insight about the doctors history. Every individual should hav...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...istory. Every individual should have an access to the doctors history since this would...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...individual should have an access to the doctors history since this would ensure whether...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...owledged for his treatment then getting an access to his history would become easier. Ail...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...icient treatment. During such cases the doctors ability to handle such ailments is very...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
... In conclusion, any patient should have an access to the doctors record of treating simil...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...ould give a better understanding of the doctors competence in treating that medical con...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...torical data giving an insight into the doctors history.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, similarly, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1546961326 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63143551233 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414364640884 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2957113217 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.625 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.567394980382 0.243740707755 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.229028387869 0.0831039109588 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174020880839 0.0758088955206 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.413823028266 0.150359130593 275% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12489044984 0.0667264976115 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.