In a business plan suggested by the manager of the Rialto Movie Theater, he quotes for a retrofit to the old-fashioned movie theater to retain its customers and enhancing their business. While the manager thinks it a sound plan for renovating the theater, his assumptions are flawed significantly with unwarranted assumptions. The reasons can be attributed specifically based on three interpretations.
Firstly, the author assumes that the new Apex theater with all its sophistication might be the reason to pull customers regardless of the location of the theater. Perhaps, the reason to choose Apex theater could be its prime attraction inside the mall. Even if we assume that people chose Apex theater for its luxurious addons, however the ratio of the population is to be considered for assessment of profits. The author hereby failed to juxtapose the location considerations for Apex and Rialto. When Rialto is in a prime location with dense population, and Apex on the outskirts of the city with comparatively less density of people, the choice of comparison of both the theater proves to be primarily flawed. What if the people who visited the mall develop the tendency to opt for a movie night? Therefore, the avant-garde of the Apex theater is the only reason for its crowd stands fallacious.
Secondly, the manager announced a survey of respondents stating the nature of price for the less movie goers in Rialto theater. Despite the increased price of newly released movies, around 85% of the people watches the movie in theater. The author failed to mention if the whole population of respondents were referring in specific to the Rialto Theater. When additional details about the nature of the survey and details subjective to Rialto Theater were known, then the author could have a clear claim about the denouement of the survey.
Finally, there could be a possibility for the people in the city to indulge in binge watching movies or series in the newly introduced system of OTG. The manager could have been myopic about the current trends preferred by the people. When most of the newly released movies are prone to be telecasted on OTGs like Netflix and Amazon Prime for packages that are quite affordable and cheaper, people lose the josh in watching the movies in a theater. Perhaps, they may save economically and watch the preferred series or movies at their comfort in home along with folks, munching and partying together. If these scenarios prove to be true, then the manager’s conclusion about retrofitting the Rialto Theater renders the plan to be futile.
To conclude, the author should have a brief analysis about the facts discussed before jumping into conclusions that is implausible at various instances. In case, there is a lucrative profit to be expected for the theater, there are more groundworks that must be addressed before initiating a plan that may still cause a serious loss for the finance of the theater.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the Rialto Movie Theater he quotes for a retrofit to the oldfashioned movie theater to re...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...claim about the denouement of the survey Finally there could be a possibility for...
^^^
Line 4, column 639, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...ese scenarios prove to be true then the managers conclusion about retrofitting the Rialt...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious loss for the finance of the theater
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96106557377 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69458953934 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446721311475 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 488.0 22.8473053892 2136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2421.0 119.503703932 2026% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 488.0 23.324526521 2092% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 99.0 5.70786347227 1734% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340604349486 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.340604349486 0.0743258471296 458% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206963173899 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654666616342 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 245.9 14.3799401198 1710% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -423.84 48.3550499002 -877% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 193.6 12.197005988 1587% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.97 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.47 8.32208582834 378% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 12.3882235529 476% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 197.2 11.1389221557 1770% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the Rialto Movie Theater he quotes for a retrofit to the oldfashioned movie theater to re...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...claim about the denouement of the survey Finally there could be a possibility for...
^^^
Line 4, column 639, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...ese scenarios prove to be true then the managers conclusion about retrofitting the Rialt...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious loss for the finance of the theater
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96106557377 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69458953934 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446721311475 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 488.0 22.8473053892 2136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2421.0 119.503703932 2026% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 488.0 23.324526521 2092% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 99.0 5.70786347227 1734% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340604349486 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.340604349486 0.0743258471296 458% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206963173899 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654666616342 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 245.9 14.3799401198 1710% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -423.84 48.3550499002 -877% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 193.6 12.197005988 1587% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.97 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.47 8.32208582834 378% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 12.3882235529 476% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 197.2 11.1389221557 1770% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.