The following appeared as part of a business plan developed by the manager of the Rialto Movie Theater.
"Despite its downtown location, the Rialto Movie Theater, a local institution for five decades, must make big changes or close its doors forever. It should follow the example of the new Apex Theater in the mall outside of town. When the Apex opened last year, it featured a video arcade, plush carpeting and seats, and a state-of-the-art sound system. Furthermore, in a recent survey, over 85 percent of respondents reported that the high price of newly released movies prevents them from going to the movies more than five times per year. Thus, if the Rialto intends to hold on to its share of a decreasing pool of moviegoers, it must offer the same features as Apex."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument that providing the same features like Apex will improve the business of Rialto movie Theaters may look logical at first glance.The author also asserts a survey results which lack in proving the assumption.And the conclusion relies on the assumption for which there is no clear evidence.
First and foremost,assumption about new Apex theater that providing the same features may increased their business is made in total vaccum. What is the gaurantee that business will burgeon? To answer this question author should give the evidence stating the future planning and results.
Furthermore , the author provides the some part of survey stating that 85% of respondents 85 percent of respondents reported that the high price of newly released movies prevents them from going to the movies more than five times per year.
This leds to rise some questions like How many people as respondents are there in survey? Also where are they belong from ?
The author should state the details about the number of respondents,place they belong to. Assumption about reasons of not going to theaters should be buttressed by evidence.There might be other reasons of not going to theaters like lack of money.
In conclusion , the author should give logical and mathmatical evidences to prove and answer the question.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...eaters may look logical at first glance.The author also asserts a survey results wh...
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Suggestion: And
...ts which lack in proving the assumption.And the conclusion relies on the assumption...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , assumption
...no clear evidence. First and foremost,assumption about new Apex theater that providing t...
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Suggestion: ,
...ure planning and results. Furthermore , the author provides the some part of su...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
... Furthermore , the author provides the some part of survey stating that 85% of resp...
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Suggestion: Also,
...ple as respondents are there in survey? Also where are they belong from ? The autho...
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Suggestion: , place
... details about the number of respondents,place they belong to. Assumption about reason...
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...eaters should be buttressed by evidence.There might be other reasons of not going to ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ers like lack of money. In conclusion , the author should give logical and math...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281938325991 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.15859030837 0.15541462614 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.057268722467 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0396475770925 0.0520304965353 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0176211453744 0.0272364105082 65% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140969162996 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0528634361233 0.0416121511921 127% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83801943171 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0308370044053 0.026700313972 115% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11013215859 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0396475770925 0.0255425247493 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0264317180617 0.0127820249294 207% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1315.0 2731.13054187 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 213.0 446.07635468 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.17370892019 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.57801047555 83% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.370892018779 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.262910798122 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192488262911 0.208842608468 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107981220657 0.135150697306 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83801943171 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 207.018472906 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572769953052 0.469332199767 122% => OK
Word variations: 54.2154122957 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 20.039408867 50% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 21.3 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9053230144 57.7814097925 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.724660767414 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.5910798122 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 2.20408163265 1.8405768891 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323251291066 0.441005458295 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155750953868 0.135418324435 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0844864104589 0.0829849096947 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.735599514957 0.58762219726 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.202236944327 0.147661913831 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138709354194 0.193483328276 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959776881336 0.0970749176394 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.209637325015 0.42659136922 49% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.143449704134 0.0774707102158 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177000122133 0.312017818177 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936732088294 0.0698173142475 134% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 14.657635468 55% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 41.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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