The manager of Rialto Movie Theater expresses a mandatory need to either make big changes in the theater or to shut it down forever, as a part of a business plan. In addition, he strongly recommends bringing changes in the theater as is done by the newly opened Apex Theater in the mall outside the town.
The argument however appears to be full of flaws from start to end. First of all, there is no substantial reason given by the manager for either making changes or closing the theater for good. The reason for giving such a statement itself is not clear. The measures suggested can be taken up in case the business of Rialto Theatre is incurring financial loss as compared to the previous years or in comparison to other theaters. However, no such point is mentioned by the manager.
Further, there are no details of feedback from the common people over the preference of theater. No dissatisfaction over the present setup of Rialto Theater is expressed by the moviegoers. Not only this, but also there is no favoritism shown towards Apex Theater for its grand interiors and a state-of-the-art sound system. This rejects any need to imitate Apex Theater in terms of its video arcade, plush carpeting and seats etc.
Moreover, such changes made will only add up to the expense of the owners and will most likely end up burdening the movie goers by hike in ticket prices. This will lead to a decrease in the number of people going to Rialto Theater. Subsequently, instead of increasing the returns, these changes may result in financial loss. By raising the price of tickets and emulating the newly built Apex Theater, there is also a risk of Rialto Theater losing its popularity, earned in five decades.
Reports from the recent survey conducted suggest that eighty five percent of respondents are prevented from going frequently to the theaters due to high price of tickets of newly released movies. This indicates a general decline in the number of moviegoers. Moreover, one can not really point out if Apex Theater is running more successfully, as there is no information about the theater drawing more crowds. Similarly, the likelihood of Rialto Theater being visited more frequently can not be ruled out.
More significantly, Rialto Theater has the advantage of its location and a sound history. It is situated in the city center for almost about five decades. There is a strong probability of Apex Theater being at a disadvantage, as it is situated in a mall outside the town. This may be the reason behind its lavish interior decors in order to attract more crowds. Making the most of the privilege of its suitable location, Rialto Theater should lookout for other modes to attract moviegoers, instead of aping the other theaters and spending unnecessarily.
Conclusively, the argument given by the manager to bring about drastic changes in Rialto Theater is not acceptable due to lack of any sound reasoning.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are on the wrong track. This is an argument essay, not an issue essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2373 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.579 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.88 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.152 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.44 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...c and cultural interests are different. Further, the author states to follow the...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...w the example of Apex Theater which has a 'video arcade, plush carpeting and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11239193084 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7383284696 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515850144092 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8195071726 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.352941176 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204336866331 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636385891075 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591113163833 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850539846243 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699259105712 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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