The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The section stated in Dean's newsletter is aimed for students to help the local charity services and provide some of their valuable time for the society. It is a very thought-out idea by the dean, dependent on certain factors for it's success.
The thing that pops into anyone's mind is, what kind of local charities are there i.e. the main motive of those charities. There can be several type of these charities, some which aims for overall growth of society and some may be questionable, which might have some shady underlying and would use students' precious time for their own benifit. As shown in various movies, there would be orphanages performing malpractice in their background, and this could very well hold true in real world. So, the dean should definitely keep this in mind.
Not only that, the dean should not just bloat out with charities having only a certain kind of community service. The community service offerings offered by a charity should contain various type of services they provide to the community. Not only it makes a charity more diverse, it gives students a lot of options in terms of enrollment to these community service, thereby students are more likely to devote the alloted time of community service, maybe even more.
And speaking of students likely to join community service, the dean should also keep in mind that most of the students are less likely to do community service just in the name of benifit to the society. They are very likely to incline the community work based on their own self-interest. And since the dean has proposed to provide free community service, it is very likely that the very premise aimed for betterment of those charities might actually see very few students enrolling for the community service.
The idea stated in newspaper is indeed very novel, and the dean should incorporate it, whilst keeping in mind the above assumptions should be taken care of, else they are very likely to hinder the actual motive it strives for.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1619 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.776 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.397 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.171 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.648 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun type seems to be countable; consider using: 'several types'.
Suggestion: several types
...motive of those charities. There can be several type of these charities, some which aims for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, may, so, well, in fact, kind of, speaking of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89970501475 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46307561814 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492625368732 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0795271862 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.769230769 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15105129374 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628690515769 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417327247382 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943551594399 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045107666732 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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