The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
The university of Wabash is considering to impose a graduation requirement for the students to perform some unpaid community service in the pursuit of preparing students as well-rounded and charitable members of society. It is also being concluded that the local charities in need will recieve required help to continue their efforts after above consideration is enacted. But the validity of this argument can be challanged based on certain unstated assumptions the author has made. These assumptions have been scrutinized below.
First of all the authour has not mentioned anything which shows a relationship between performing some community service and this leading to the developement of any individual towards being well rounded and charitable. A strong evidence or perhaps, a research study should be presented before concluding that a community service by any student will lead him to become a well-rounded and charitable member of the society.
Again, the author fails to address what kind of help do these charities need and assumes that help needed by charities can be invariably provided by the university students. Is it really what a university can offer? or to be specific, these students can offer? For instance, say these universities are willing to provide man power to these charities which is actually not needed. Under such situations, the final conclusion that charities will recieve the required help to continue their efforts is invalidated.
Even if the above points are true, author still fails to mention anything about why particularly eight hours of community service for a total of nine months will prove sufficient to achieve a well-rounded and charitable person. Is this claim based on a research or these are just numbers came out of nowhere into the picture are needed to be addressed. Hence before concluding these given numbers, a more thorough study was needed which author seemingly has failed to accomplish.
The argument, as of now, turns out to be flawed because of the unwarrented assumptions explained above. If the author is able to provide justifications for each of the above assumptions, then the validity of argument can be concluded succesfully
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1814 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.183 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.08 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
... it really what a university can offer? or to be specific, these students can offe...
^^
Line 7, column 354, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...the picture are needed to be addressed. Hence before concluding these given numbers, ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, really, so, still, then, well, for instance, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9550772634 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517142857143 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0669310507 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.9375 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194001019272 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672827325212 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090402088858 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112542842916 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722148932488 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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