The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
According to Dean's newsletter, for making students well-rounded and charitable members of the society, The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students, which can be beneficial to both the students and the local charities. This can turn out into an efficient idea if, these three assumptions can be assessed rightfully.
Firstly, one of the assumptions is that the local charities which will be listed on the university's website are truthful and trustable. From what all sources, the university has validated the credibility of the charities? This is an important factor because, the students are putting their time and energy into working these charities, they should be provided with good and credible charities, so that they don't get treachered at the end of their service, and have a bad influence on them which is completely the opposite intention of this whole charity service requirement.
Secondly, it is assumed that the real-world experience will be useful for the students. As they are supposed to work for 8 hours per month for 9 months, they should be working in charities which are suitable to their careers. This will keep them more interested to work and also be educational at the same time. For example, a student who wants to be a teacher, can serve people by teaching and a student who wants to practice medicine can serve the charities by treating people. In this way, it can be useful to the student.
Lastly, students might not have to right expertise to get familiarized in an environment where they never belonged. This could lead to additional training from the university's side, or even worse from the charity's side. This might increase the costs of either the university or the charity itself.
In conclusion, the argument which stands now, has flaws and can be further evaluated. Due to it's reliance on the unwarranted assumptions, there could be things that can go wrong. More evidence with statistics is required to prove that charitable service is fruitful to the students and the charities, so that a correct decision with the right rules is taken by the university.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1773 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.792 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.624 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.318 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 407, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...od and credible charities, so that they dont get treachered at the end of their serv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06424581006 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87270506334 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.7372393788 57.8364921388 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.3125 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174764916537 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623108291392 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939618358171 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110428919695 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894335602942 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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