The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The article in newsletter aims at proving community service serves a bilateral aim i.e. to help the community and to encourage overall growth of student. This initiative will help in achieving that bilateral aim. But the author is just looking it more as an objective and less as a subjective matter.
In the newsletter, the article aims at showing that both student as well as local charities will tend to work together to achieve same objective. But due to the fact that the community service is proposed as a graduation requirement for the course, the students tend to take the community service just like an uninteresting subject, attending a charity just for the sake of it, so that they can get a grade. There is almost little to no incentive encourage other than being a compulsion for a long period of 9 months, which in turn enervate the students towards the charity.
Also in the article, there is very little emphasis of what kind of local charities (like environmental or wildlife) will be approved by Dean's office. This could potentially lead to a lot of confusion over which charity to choose from. It could cause chaos amongst students over which charity to choose from. This could backfire to Dean's office as many student might not turn up to charities with real interest, or there might be a high number of requests for same charity, or a request to even get a different charity onboard.
The article strongly emphasise on developing moral and ethical values in student, and make them a better person in the future, but the fact that it has been made a compulsion by university to graduate could lend to chaotic affair between student and the charity, which overall would overshadow the main objective of why the program was brought in the first place.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1439 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.361 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... But the author is just looking it more as an objective and less as a subjective m...
^^
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ooking it more as an objective and less as a subjective matter. In the newsle...
^^
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ticle aims at showing that both student as well as local charities will tend to work toget...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, well, kind of, as well as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 306.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83660130719 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62748552964 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.6473965141 57.8364921388 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.545454545 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113841389744 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393167633122 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394844768415 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691676139041 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352592032252 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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