Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In recent time, paleo diets are becoming increasingly popular due to the several advantages it provides, as shown by several anecdotal evidence. Although there are many intriguing facts given by the arguement, there are a few fallacies we need to consider.
Proponets assumed the fact that Paleo diets had brought about an evolution in our ancestors, so inadverdently, it would also bring about a benign change in our bodies. But they do not take into consideration that our current body composition, our environment and our way of living is very different than our ancestors. For this fact to hold, the proponents need to do have evidence for benign effect on the current generation.
Secondly, the anecdotal evidence does prove that there is a less chance of a person to get sick if they have a paleo diet. But the assumption that has been led from this is completely wrong. Ancient humans might have known something more than our current physiology, but it is again, a might. The fact that ancient humans incorporated this diet because there could be less irrigation and farming in those time, the culture could be different from now, and many other things. It is again, a "could be".
Lastly, skeptics may be pointing out at somthing meaningful i.e. the paleo diets cannot replinish cartilage in a person's knees and elbows, and thereby not providing with anything meaningful. In the arguement, opposition stance talks about less metabolic and inflammatory disease, but does not fully counter the opposition's stance. In fact, it tries to divert it's stance to other advantages of paleo diet. No matter how much you stress out about other advantages of anything, ultimately, if you are not solving the root problem, that is still not a solution.
So, in my opinion, the arguement needs to strengthen up their stance by providing solid facts against the above issues, and provide a meticulous data, which is not just based on an early pretense.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1576 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.834 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.289 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...and our way of living is very different than our ancestors. For this fact to hold, t...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ow, and many other things. It is again, a 'could be'. Lastly, skepti...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'oppositions'' or 'opposition's'?
Suggestion: oppositions'; opposition's
...disease, but does not fully counter the oppositions stance. In fact, it tries to divert its...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03374233129 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76199187531 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579754601227 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4040624712 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.4 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145758269679 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460007461913 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437162737012 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769409628459 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380298871713 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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