In the preceding argument, the author claims that there is a relation between the birth order and level of cortisol and its impact on the level of activity, the conclusion of the argument is based on the following premises. Firstly, the author cities a study on 18 rhesus monkeys indicates that first born infant produce twice amount of cortisol when they facing unfamiliar monkey, moreover, he states that the first pregnancy had higher level of cortisol compering with who has several offspring. Secondly, he states that firstborn human produce more chortisol on their parents return after absence. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora of assumption that could undermine the value of the argument.
To begin with, the author states that firstborn has higher level of cortisol by facing stimulus. but he fails when readily citing a study over monkeys and directly link the results to the human beings. In deed, there are multifarious factors that remains elusive and intractable. Such as, using monkeys results reflect and emulate the human being. Then, if we assume that using monkeys are plausible, is the sample size enough? Is it representative enough to draw a broad conclusion. Moreover, what kind of demographic data they used perhaps their sleeping habits type of foods has a role on the chortisol level. In other words he fails to mention the controlling variables to conclude the assumption.
Second piece of evidence, the author fails to describe the fact that rising the chortisol level when encounter foreign monkeys is not the single factor, because chortisol is part of complete system, and there are another hormones play a major role to stabilize the body. Further, indicating that the first child has higher level it could be due to lack of experience or perhaps the parents relation stronger than anyone so the chortisol level is fluctuated. Then, the fact that we do not have any significant information about this assumption, and would need to know from where he concluded the assumption?. Thus, the assumption lack a depth of details that would help to evaluate the argument.
Thirdly, the author fails to provide evidence about the first pregnancy level of cortisol, and several questions would need to know such as, how many female monkeys in the study? What kind of stressful situation they face? Is there any diseases and what about their eating habits or simply it could be the first pregnancy so there are different changes on their bodies that has an effect on the chortisol level. So, in order to strengthen the argument all these questions need reliable answers.
In conclusion, the author fails to provide one of the key factors. Namely, all the previous assumptions are equivocal. So, without complete information the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13617021277 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62419014647 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.0755039498 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.583333333 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125891973597 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302471705503 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355872513722 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696952183308 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326588039843 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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