The following appeared as part of a memo from the manager of an automobile manufacturing company.
"Because the demand for our automobiles is expected to increase dramatically, we need to open a new manufacturing plant as soon as possible in order to continue to thrive. Our marketing projections indicate that 80 million people will want to buy our automobiles, yet our existing plant can only produce 40 million automobiles. The new plant can be opened on a part- , with workers from our existing site rotating responsibilities, until an operational staff can be trained. A major airplane manufacturer was extremely successful using this part-time rotating strategy when it opened its new plant five years ago."
The manager of an automobile company claims that their automobiles' demand in the market is growing, so that he recommends to establish a new production plant at the earliest in order to perpetuate thriving. He further suggests to employ workers on part-time basis: a concept which rotates the responsibilities of the existing workers. He tries to substantiate his argument by giving an example of an airplane company, although his assumption and the derived final conclusion seems full of fallacies, and needs to ruminate over several specific details before jumping to this conclusion.
First of all, the manager's memorandum clearly mentions that the demand for their automobiles is expected to upsurge: additional 80 million people are willing to purchase automobiles. Nevertheless, he should be clear that there is a huge difference between " willing to buy" and "able to buy", peoples are willing to buy his automobiles does not reflect their capacity to procure it. There may be a situation, an indigent man, for example, might have will to buy, he does not have enough financial stamina to do it, however. Thus, the manager should be cautions if the field researchers have included such types of people as well. Therefore, the manager's argument would have been further innervated if he had supplied further evidences describing those 80 million peoples are the people who have both will, and the financial standards to purchase automobiles.
Likewise, according to the claim put forwarded by the manager, he recommends to open up a new manufacturing plant on a part-time basis, with labors from existing company rotating their responsibilities. Before making this recommendation manager would have considered factors - like the perception of labor unions in this regard, personal view of existing workers, and so forth. Without conferring to the ideas, and view points of labor, it would be fallacious to assume that they would accede to this idea. I, therefore, suggest the manager to make an alternative plan for the situation, if the workers denied such proposal. It would be better for the company, and the professional success of manager to formulate a new plan for the situation if labor unions said big NO to the changed responsibilities appropriated to them.
Finally and perhaps most importantly, the manager unfairly assumes that his automobile company, and an aeroplane company, and their market are quite same. Laughable, is not it? The manager should be clear on the fact that airplane and the automobile markets are not same. They are vastly different, indeed. This plan thrived in an jet plane manufacturer company, and what are the evidences that helped the manager to conclude that it will be successful in his automobile company as well. Hence, the manager should elucidate the missing gap in this argument linking similarities - and of course dissimilarities too, existed between these two markets, and the manufacturing.
To recapitulate, the manager should address many specific details missing in his claim before jumping hurriedly to the conclusion, although the premises supplied by the manager might be true. For the company, in order to persist thriving, the concerns raised above needs to be carefully studied before the establishment of new plant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends establishing'.
Suggestion: recommends establishing
...nd in the market is growing, so that he recommends to establish a new production plant at the earliest ...
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Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests employing'.
Suggestion: suggests employing
...rder to perpetuate thriving. He further suggests to employ workers on part-time basis: a concept w...
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Line 2, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...to this conclusion. First of all, the managers memorandum clearly mentions that the de...
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Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...types of people as well. Therefore, the managers argument would have been further innerv...
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Line 4, column 769, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
... the situation if labor unions said big NO to the changed responsibilities approp...
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Line 4, column 771, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he situation if labor unions said big NO to the changed responsibilities appropri...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...responsibilities appropriated to them. Finally and perhaps most importantly, th...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ponsibilities appropriated to them. Finally and perhaps most importantly, the manag...
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Line 6, column 329, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...different, indeed. This plan thrived in an jet plane manufacturer company, and wha...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se two markets, and the manufacturing. To recapitulate, the manager should addr...
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Line 8, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... before the establishment of new plant.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'of course', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227805695142 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.164154103853 0.15541462614 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.070351758794 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0469011725293 0.0520304965353 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0469011725293 0.0272364105082 172% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.100502512563 0.125424944231 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0452261306533 0.0416121511921 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00484627457 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0485762144054 0.026700313972 182% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00167504187605 0.001811407834 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.105527638191 0.113004496875 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0268006700168 0.0255425247493 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00670016750419 0.0127820249294 52% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3317.0 2731.13054187 121% => OK
No of words: 525.0 446.07635468 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3180952381 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424761904762 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.346666666667 0.287650121315 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.232380952381 0.208842608468 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142857142857 0.135150697306 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00484627457 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 207.018472906 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489523809524 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 57.9947571669 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3071855877 57.7814097925 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.952380952 141.986410481 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.724660767414 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 59.6666666667 51.9672348444 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.44805194805 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495546662221 0.441005458295 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127105059747 0.135418324435 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0796014297843 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.568555875291 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177201868884 0.147661913831 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200888367252 0.193483328276 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966743447665 0.0970749176394 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.393090286062 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0234387832212 0.0774707102158 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346242847542 0.312017818177 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458865010004 0.0698173142475 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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