The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Sender of a letter, to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette, recommends the authority to limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day, during the summer season. He points out that doing so will substantially reduce the number of accidents on the Balmer Island. To prop up his recommendation, he gives an example of a neighboring island - Seaville. However, although premises supplied by him might be genuine, the assumption and the finally derived conclusion are utterly fallacious. Clearly, therefore, many specific details needs to be minutely studied, by the letter sender, before I accede to his argument.
First of all, the sender divulges that the population on the Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. Hence, to reduce the number of accident cases in the island, he suggests to reduce the number of moped - popular form of transportation on the Balmer island - by 50%. However, he fails to supply the reasons that the accidents happening in the island is merely due to the reason of higher number of mopeds. There might be, for example, several infrastructural deficiencies - like narrow roads, lack of footpaths, lack of street lights - due to which there might be higher number of accidents in the island. Without knowing the status of the road, arrangement of footpath (for pedestrians) of proper width, it is quite difficult to accept his conclusion that merely lowering the number of mopeds will considerably plummet the number of accidents. Thus, the argument would have been far stronger, if the sender of the letter had supplied these information.
Similarly, another point of concern is why he is so much concerned only about summer months. There may be several accidents during winter, or spring, days too. He has failed to supply these required evidences, however, before jumping to the conclusion. Likewise, he explicitly mentions that by reducing the number of mopeds by 50% will reduce the number of accident by exactly 50%. Without explaining the type of statistical methods he applied to find-out this result, it is still unclear to accept that his logic is right.
Finally and probably most importantly, the sender falsely assumes that this method, already applied in Seaville island, will be equally effective in Balmer island as well. There might have been several disparities between these two island - like geographical, administrative etc. Without knowing deeper knowledge about these differences - and similarities too, it is hard to claim that the idea will be effective in Balmer island as well.
To recapitulate, it is clear that the argument of letter sender is rife with fallacies. To give thumbs up, he should address many species concerned raised above in the essay. After addressing these concerns, his argument will be much stronger than it is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...s from 50 per day to 25 per day, during the summer season. He points out that doing so will subst...
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Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly reduce the number of accidents on the Balmer Island. To prop up his recommenda...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests reducing'.
Suggestion: suggests reducing
...ber of accident cases in the island, he suggests to reduce the number of moped - popular form of t...
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Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lack of footpaths, lack of street lights - due to which there might be higher num...
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Line 3, column 957, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...f the sender of the letter had supplied these information. Similarly, another point of concern...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... to accept that his logic is right. Finally and probably most importantly, the send...
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Line 7, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hese differences - and similarities too, it is hard to claim that the idea will b...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231775700935 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.136448598131 0.15541462614 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0654205607477 0.0836205057962 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0728971962617 0.0520304965353 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0392523364486 0.0272364105082 144% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.140186915888 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0392523364486 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.786551151 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0373831775701 0.026700313972 140% => OK
Particles: 0.00373831775701 0.001811407834 206% => OK
Determiners: 0.0934579439252 0.113004496875 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242990654206 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00373831775701 0.0127820249294 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2880.0 2731.13054187 105% => OK
No of words: 473.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.088794926 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.437632135307 0.378187486979 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276955602537 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175475687104 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112050739958 0.135150697306 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.786551151 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501057082452 0.469332199767 107% => OK
Word variations: 57.9200893778 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3617234066 57.7814097925 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.909090909 141.986410481 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.681818181818 0.724660767414 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.1955602537 51.9672348444 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.65413533835 1.8405768891 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.6885881148 0.441005458295 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10308811688 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0984303925516 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555222309965 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163805291601 0.147661913831 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270542102769 0.193483328276 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195949170072 0.0970749176394 202% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392094042964 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.227600484966 0.0774707102158 294% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.420859188497 0.312017818177 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.213331037508 0.0698173142475 306% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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