The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager."One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one

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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment has recommended to restrict the water supply by modifying the showerheads operating in its apartment system. In an attempt to shore up his idea he gives the example of its three buildings where the showerheads are already adjusted. However, on meticulous assay, the argument lacks many hard facts which could really fortify it, so that the implicit assumption and the finally derived conclusion sounds utterly skeptical. Hence, before I accede to the recommendation put forwarded by the owner, following concerns raised below should be addressed.

First of all, the owner explicitly mentions that the water supply has been restricted to the one third of the previous level. However, due to lack of water, the apartment renters might abandon the apartment, for water is the basic requirement for daily life. The owner should be wary enough regarding this consequence. Simply, restricting the water supply do not ensure higher profit. Moreover, the owner says that the water restriction program was initiated just a month ago; is not it so haste to conclude based on the experience of merely one month? If he want to thrive in his business, he need to wait for few more months, before making such recommendation, to get reliable and trustworthy data.

Similarly, with no obscurity, the owner mentions that the reading of the water - or the monthly bill - has not been read yet. If the reading is not available yet, then what are the evidences based on which the owner claims that reducing the water supply fuels up the profit? The owner of the apartment needs to make it clear. Similarly, the owner writes that few complaints have been received regarding the low water pressure. The owner do not argue further regarding the consequence of such complaints. These complaint may increase in the days to come and there is a possibility that if the owner do not pay heed to the customers, the customers might leave the apartment leaving the owner bankrupt. The owner should ponder over such future ramifications too.

Finally, and probably more importantly, while reading between the lines, it can be inferred that the owner has unfairly assumed cutting water supply as a best method to boost up his profit; however, there might be several methods to earn higher profit - such as giving more facilities and taking more price, increasing advertisements, and so forth. Nevertheless, the owner is silent regarding why he considered limiting water supply as panacea to earn more profit. The owner should make it clear why he omitted the possibility of other option, as mentioned above, as a method to earn higher profit.

To recapitulate, the argument made by the owner of Sunnyside Towers apartment is rife with chink in armors: it lacks many hard facts to bolster his argument. Therefore, to avoid any run the gauntlets from the manager - who is going to ponder over his proposal - the owner should address above raised concerns, which would make the argument far corroborated than it is standing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended restricting'.
Suggestion: recommended restricting
...r of the Sunnyside Towers apartment has recommended to restrict the water supply by modifying the showe...
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Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...e experience of merely one month? If he want to thrive in his business, he need to w...
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Line 3, column 670, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efore making such recommendation, to get reliable and trustworthy data. Simila...
^^
Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this complaint' or 'These complaints'?
Suggestion: This complaint; These complaints
...ing the consequence of such complaints. These complaint may increase in the days to come and th...
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Line 5, column 636, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er do not pay heed to the customers, the customers might leave the apartment leav...
^^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...nfairly assumed cutting water supply as a best method to boost up his profit; ho...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as a best method to boost up his profit; however, there might be several methods ...
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'regarding', 'similarly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'such as', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218472468917 0.25644967241 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.188277087034 0.15541462614 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0728241563055 0.0836205057962 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0657193605684 0.0520304965353 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0355239786856 0.0272364105082 130% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0959147424512 0.125424944231 76% => OK
Participles: 0.0674955595027 0.0416121511921 162% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72929417246 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0355239786856 0.026700313972 133% => OK
Particles: 0.00532859680284 0.001811407834 294% => OK
Determiners: 0.115452930728 0.113004496875 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0230905861456 0.0255425247493 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0142095914742 0.0127820249294 111% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3047.0 2731.13054187 112% => OK
No of words: 507.0 446.07635468 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00986193294 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353057199211 0.378187486979 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254437869822 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.183431952663 0.208842608468 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138067061144 0.135150697306 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72929417246 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 207.018472906 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510848126233 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 60.8180454335 52.1807786196 117% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0454545455 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4494163878 57.7814097925 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0454545455 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.818181818182 0.724660767414 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.4892415277 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.31901840491 1.8405768891 72% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.626480592265 0.441005458295 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12188642194 0.135418324435 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0965032643633 0.0829849096947 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.62660270554 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.1480168248 0.147661913831 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.288932882562 0.193483328276 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123779979896 0.0970749176394 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.4692078967 0.42659136922 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.157903943283 0.0774707102158 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.448494114408 0.312017818177 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1200551492 0.0698173142475 172% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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