The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The owner of the sunny side towers apartment complex recommends that the shower heads of twelve buildings in sunnyside complex should be modified to decrease the water pay each month and thus increase the profits further. The owner recommends his opinion on the two assumptions. First, the shower heads of first three buildings of sunnyside towers complex were modified and the maximum water flow was restricted to one-third of what it used to be. Second, modifying the showerheads of remaining twelve buildings would decrease the water pay and increase the further profits. Although, the owner fails to justify his stands and therefore the recommendation falls short of relevant proofs.
Firstly, the owner states that the shower heads of first three buildings of sunnyside towers complex were modified to restrict the maximum water flow, but the owner fails to provide the appropriate evidence which would show the change in water usage before and after modifying showerheads. While there might be chances that the actual usage of the water is decreased by the people living in apartment and not by the modified showerheads. Even if we considered that the water usage is reduced by applying the modified showerheads there is no clear data about how much water usage is being reduced. Therefore, the owner must provide the clear evidence of water usage before and after modifying the showerheads and also provide the clear numerical or graphical representation of water usage of all three buildings and how much savings will be gained by the complex after applying this change.
Secondly, the owner states that there have been few complaints about the low water pressure. This clearly states that people of complex are not satisfied with this change. Even though the other people have not complained about it but there are chances that they also might be facing with same problem or they might face this problem in future. Therefore, the owner must make sure that the problem of low water pressure in first three buildings is resolved and also make sure that people living in the complex are satisfied with the changed showerheads.
Furthermore, the owner states that modifying the showerheads and restricting the water usage would lead to increase the profit of complex, but he fails to provide the proper evidence for this. Conversely, for modifying the showerheads of twelve buildings would cost a lot as compared to the first three buildings, and if people of remaining twelve buildings find it uncomfortable to this change than it might lead to loss instead of any profit. This change might be possible if the owners of remaining twelve buildings agrees to apply this modified showerheads and make sure that they would not have any inconsequences with this change.
Therefore, the owner of the sunnyside tower complex fails to convince in regard to his recommendation, and thus he should provide more and clear evidence and proofs to provide a good stand to his recommendation.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2460 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.031 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.568 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.957 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towers'' or 'tower's'?
Suggestion: towers'; tower's
The owner of the sunny side towers apartment complex recommends that the s...
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Line 2, column 438, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt and not by the modified showerheads. Even if we considered that the water usage is r...
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Line 2, column 819, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...er usage of all three buildings and how much savings will be gained by the complex a...
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Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...problem or they might face this problem in future. Therefore, the owner must make sure th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thus, while, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1145194274 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64910094007 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.368098159509 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6269374122 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.117647059 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7647058824 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343742422951 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132632353759 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116335169484 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20467308612 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105386282062 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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