Young people enjoy life more than the older people do. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support you answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Every person living the life has two options, whether he want to spend his life happily and enjoying or being unhappy and sadly. Many people would agree that older people does not enjoy their life more than the young people. But I clearly disagree that young people enjoy life more than older people. According to me being happy and enjoying in life has no connection with the ages. I would explore the reason for this in the following essay.
To begin with, I would like to present the example of my grandfather, he is almost in his sixties, and even though he still enjoys his life by indulging in various activities he is fond of like exercising everyday, doing cycling, going on an adventure trip with his old friends and exploring the various sites in the country. Keeping this in view one cannot say that he does not enjoy his life in his old age. To clarify, happiness and enjoyment in life does not matter with the age but it clearly depends upon us that how we see our perspective life and what we do for ourselves to keep the life going in enjoyment and happiness. Let it be if the person is young or old, the views and thoughts that person have in relation to his life matters more in case of living the life happily. In short, the age of the person cannot determine how much does the person would be happy or enjoying his life it fully depends and varies from person to person that how one chooses to live his life.
Additionally, on the other hand, I would like to present my own example, I am too young, but I am not enjoying my life that much as my grandfather do, the reason behind is that I had many responsibilities on my shoulder, like my studies, part time job, earnings, savings and many more. So this cannot mean that I would never be able to enjoy my life, but right now its my struggling days and compromising some enjoyment in life right now is the key to become something in life and grow with complete enthusiasm, in order so that I can enjoy and live my life happily in future just as like my grandfather. To be on point, living the life happily or sacrificing the happiness is completely dependent on oneself according to the situations and not really by the one's age.
In sum, according to me the the way one should live a life, happily or sadly is completely dependent on oneself and it differs from person to person and therefore, i disagree that the young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...ng the life has two options, whether he want to spend his life happily and enjoying ...
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Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ople enjoy life more than older people. According to me being happy and enjoying in life has no...
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Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ctivities he is fond of like exercising everyday, doing cycling, going on an adventure t...
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Line 2, column 838, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... age of the person cannot determine how much does the person would be happy or enjoy...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...lities on my shoulder, like my studies, part time job, earnings, savings and many more. S...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...be able to enjoy my life, but right now its my struggling days and compromising som...
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Line 4, column 25, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... the ones age. In sum, according to me the the way one should live a life, happily or ...
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Line 4, column 25, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... the ones age. In sum, according to me the the way one should live a life, happily or ...
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Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...rs from person to person and therefore, i disagree that the young people enjoy li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, still, therefore, thus, in short, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42037544277 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428888888889 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0422108111 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.071428571 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1428571429 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232019789315 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114471414297 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792673919317 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187008740874 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710899856086 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.95 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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