Luck plays more of a role in determining success than work ethic does.
Luck is a fortunate, and not everyone can get it when it comes to the success. But the work ethic is self dependant and our abilities included to carry out some work to achieve the steps towards the success. I disagree that luck plays more of a role in determining success than the work ethic does. Success is no accident it is all about the hard work, preservance, learning, studying, analysing, and the most important the love for whatever you are doing.
One can achieve the success by doing the hard work and being ambitious toward the goals and targets, relying on the luck is just like waiting for the things to happen on its own without any hard work and determination for anything we want it to be done. I believe that people can make there own luck by creating there own strategies and great preparation for the better outcomes from the execution of the targeted work. One of the best example we can consider is the invention of the today’s world largest social network, Facebook by Mark Zuckerberg, there’s a lot of work ethic behind the creation of the Facebook app and lots of theories and experience included for creating it. The success behind the successfully running app is nothing but the perfect theories applied and the consistent analysis for reducing the errors in the programming. This success might not have been possible if he were dependant on the luck for such opportunity. He created his own luck by giving his best and doing the hard work which brought him towards the success. This clear example brings true fact, into the limelight that the good work ethics is everything one need to be successful in his life and not the luck.
Another example we can consider is the, Elon musks great inventions like tesla, paypal and the spacex, which have taken this world one step towards the change to better phase. The invention of the tesla company brought the evolution in the automobile industry, which might not be possible without the perfect idea and the consistent hard work for the imitation of the idea and executing the idea in the real world, paypal changed the payment system from cash to cashless and which saved a lots of time and boosted the economy, thus behind this extreme success lies the hard work and the various skills and study to achieve the various checkpoints while creating the new system, so here depending on the luck would be inevitable as this new systems wouldn’t have created on its own or by any natural means, and thus the work ethic plays a important role while moving toward the success.
In conclusion, to achieve anything, let it be how small or great success it is the work ethic is important part which one need to considered it as an essential role for achieving success and not the luck to be dependant upon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70961145194 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5105046096 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453987730061 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 153.981379738 60.3974514979 255% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.5 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.9285714286 23.4991977007 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375636655292 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174091491933 0.0831039109588 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.212052905908 0.0758088955206 280% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273854467552 0.150359130593 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154133924483 0.0667264976115 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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