"Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced twenty days with below-average temperatures, and local weather forecasters throughout the region predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Based on these developments, we predict a large increase in the demand for heating oil. Therefore, we recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
Here the advisor is recommending for the investment in consolidated industries who’s major business operation is selling of home heating oil. The advisor support his recommendation by two assumptions. First, the advisor states that there might be increase in the demand for the heating oil, due to the below average temperature since last twenty days in northeastern, United States. Second, there is increase in many new homes built in the northeastern region and states that according to local forecasters there might be similar weather for several few more years. Thus this assumptions made by the advisor does not have clear evidence that would suggest for the investment in the consolidated industries.
Firstly, the advisor states that last year the temperature in northeastern, United States was below average, whereas the correct temperature cannot be predicted as due to highly changing climatic conditions and there might be possibility that this year and upcoming years the temperature would be in normal condition, and the use of heating oil would also be decreased accordingly. The advisor also states that the local forecasters predicted that the temperature in northeastern would continue to remain similar that of last year for several more years. In contradiction, the forecast might be proved wrong in upcoming years as there is fluctuating climatic change everyday and the forecast would also change accordingly. So keeping in view of forecasts it would not be right decision to invest in industries having major business operation of selling heating oil.
Although, the selling of heating oil would largely depend on the climatic conditions, and if the temperature would retain it fluctuation and get stable in day to day life then there would be loss in investment as the heating oil would’nt have more sells until the climate get colder. The recommendation by the advisor is rendered weak due to unavailability of proper evidences and information.
Secondly, the advisor states that there is increase in the new homes built in the northeastern side, whereas this makes no sense that this would increase the selling of heating oil. New homes built might considered with the latest heating technology which does not consist of heating oil and might have replaced with some better heating technology. Even if considered that there is no new technology built in new homes but there is not correct figure of new built homes, there might be only few new built homes which would not affect largely with the selling of heating oil. Thus the second assumption also holds no ground and lacks a lot of information which adviser should have added with proper numerical data or graphs.
The advisor fails to convince us in regard to his recommendation, as it lacks a lot of evidence and information which advisor need to add to convince the readers. Making investment in heating oil industries without such evidence and data might result in a big loss for the investment company. Therefore, the advisor needs to answer that whether the forecast predicted is viable? Does the forecast provides with any numerical data or graphical presentation of upcoming climatic change? Whether the new built homes consists of new heating technology system? What are the clear number of new built homes? Thus answering this questions would convince the recommendation stated by the advisor.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 546 350
No. of Characters: 2797 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.834 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.123 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.529 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.354 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 572, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lar weather for several few more years. Thus this assumptions made by the advisor do...
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Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...eather for several few more years. Thus this assumptions made by the advisor does no...
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Line 2, column 486, Rule ID: CONTINUE_TO_REMAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'remain'.
Suggestion: remain
...t the temperature in northeastern would continue to remain similar that of last year for several m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 666, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...as there is fluctuating climatic change everyday and the forecast would also change acco...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 575, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...argely with the selling of heating oil. Thus the second assumption also holds no gro...
^^^^
Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provide'?
Suggestion: provide
... predicted is viable? Does the forecast provides with any numerical data or graphical pr...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2855.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 545.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23853211009 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85990247529 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387155963303 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.0 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0024011225 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.772727273 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7727272727 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165165325852 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579636632709 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581036480859 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105826273327 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652433691939 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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