Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced twenty days with below-average temperatures, and local weather forecasters throughout the region predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because of these developments, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil
The speaker unreasonably concludes that as the new homes are increasing there would be more demand of heating oil.The evidence proffered by the speaker is that this weather condition would be continued for several more years due to which there would be more demand for heating oil.The evidence is insubstantial,unrepresentative and irrelevant to the issues involved.Therefore,unless a number of questions are answered satisfactorily,this cannot be considered as cogent argument.
Firstly,the speaker states that in weather in northeastern united states is typically cold but no statistical data of how the temperature varies when compared to other states.He mentions that previous year for twenty days there was a below-average temperature what exactly is the average temperature is not given in the argument.There is no relative information as said by the forecasters prediction that the weather would continue for several more years.There no clear information the term traditionally used oil which is used for heating refers to?
Secondly,There is a misconception that just by the local weather forecasters prediction that weather will continue with low degrees for several more years.If so have they done any such predictions before which happened later has to be mentioned to support the argument.He also mentions that new homes were built during past year but there is appropriate as how many were increased in number or what if they just reconstructed the houses due to temperature change there might be a chance that people wish to construct which can keep them warm.
Thirdly,the heating oil has to be mentioned clearly for what all purpose do they use it for.Is it for producing fire or for cooking purpose or heating water should be more informative to understand the argument.The speaker also fails to provide the data about of sales about the heating oil what if they can produce the oil themselves then there is no point in demand of heating oil of the consolidate industries.
In conclusion,this argument would have been more eloquent if the speaker had given more information on the major use of heating oil and temperature statistical data to explain the argument.In the absence of requisite information this argument can't be deemed to be persuasive.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1883 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.995 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.873 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.708 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.447 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.791 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...ere would be more demand of heating oil.The evidence proffered by the speaker is th...
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...re would be more demand for heating oil.The evidence is insubstantial,unrepresentat...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...re would be more demand for heating oil.The evidence is insubstantial,unrepresentat...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , unrepresentative
...eating oil.The evidence is insubstantial,unrepresentative and irrelevant to the issues involved.T...
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...e and irrelevant to the issues involved.Therefore,unless a number of questions are answer...
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...elevant to the issues involved.Therefore,unless a number of questions are answered sati...
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...of questions are answered satisfactorily,this cannot be considered as cogent argument...
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...sidered as cogent argument. Firstly,the speaker states that in weather in north...
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...re varies when compared to other states.He mentions that previous year for twenty ...
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...emperature is not given in the argument.There is no relative information as said by t...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'forecasters'' or 'forecaster's'?
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...r would continue for several more years.There no clear information the term tradition...
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...sed for heating refers to? Secondly,There is a misconception that just by the loc...
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Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'forecasters'' or 'forecaster's'?
Suggestion: forecasters'; forecaster's
...nception that just by the local weather forecasters prediction that weather will continue w...
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Suggestion: If
...with low degrees for several more years.If so have they done any such predictions ...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...with low degrees for several more years.If so have they done any such predictions ...
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...to be mentioned to support the argument.He also mentions that new homes were built...
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...t which can keep them warm. Thirdly,the heating oil has to be mentioned clearly...
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...for what all purpose do they use it for.Is it for producing fire or for cooking pu...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...is no point in demand of heating oil of the consolidate industries. In conclusion,this arg...
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... oil and temperature statistical data to explain the argument.In the absence of r...
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Suggestion: In
...atistical data to explain the argument.In the absence of requisite information th...
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Line 17, column 245, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... of requisite information this argument cant be deemed to be persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37883008357 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.50006179511 2.78398813304 126% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490250696379 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 22.8473053892 311% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.872989447 57.8364921388 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 386.2 119.503703932 323% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.8 23.324526521 308% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.2 5.70786347227 371% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194075266792 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113907943906 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708006297786 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113907943906 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708006297786 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.8 14.3799401198 277% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.05 48.3550499002 -19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.2 12.197005988 264% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.11 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.32208582834 129% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 11.1389221557 273% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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