Luxuries are enjoyed by people whose money either comes by inheritance or by his father who might be a successful person.There is no such great person who have achieved the best in life always enjoy their life with all luxuries and comforts.
Firstly the issue is completely acceptable to some extent because there are people who work hard just to enjoy their luxuries once they reach at a certain age.But there are some people that too this current generation is completely quiet opposite they don't work hard neither do something useful in their life other than enjoying the luxury they want in life.For example there was child who enjoyed all his luxuries from childhood and he was given everything he wanted more than enough in his life which made him the most ruthless person and in college even if he is caught during his examination he payed the college just to prove he has done nothing wrong.So one fine day he gets to know that all his fortune from forefathers was given to a charity and he was shocked by that right from that movement all his luxuries vanished in a flash of light.He certainly who was so much addicted to all the luxuries couldn't with stand this and never had a independent life right from childhood so he ended his life because he never learnt to develop in his life independently.
Secondly many people who are successful in their life has never seen the luxuries right from the beginning of their life.It is the hard work and dedication which made them the strong and independent individuals.For example Bill gates who is one of the most richest person donated most of his wealth so that his children could work hard and become independent and successful in their life without any support.If they think that they are rich and everything would come to their place when they wish to never help them become successful in life.People should always get to know the value of money they should also understand how hard it is to earn money which they just spend lavishly without thinking whether it is useful for us or not.The actual enjoyment of life is not being luxurious rather being independent and recognized as a strong person.
Thirdly like in most of the countries where people ask their children once they reach at a certain age to leave their home and earn money and study on their own should be followed by every country so that every individual start living their own life and would be able to face all the ups and downs in their life and make them struggle to become successful and independent in their life.
In the conclusion i agree with the speaker that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life has made people not accomplishing anything in their life without a sense of vision or dream how to be successful and independent in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7197309417 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49085782413 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455156950673 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 111.0 23.0359550562 482% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 336.986924821 60.3974514979 558% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 526.25 118.986275619 442% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 111.5 23.4991977007 474% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.0 5.21951772744 383% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364825122832 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.239198544286 0.0831039109588 288% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417224516349 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239198544286 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417224516349 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 56.6 14.1392134831 400% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -32.73 48.8420337079 -67% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 45.4 12.1743820225 373% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.28 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.12 8.38706741573 133% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 11.8971910112 471% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 46.4 11.2143820225 414% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 11.7820224719 484% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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