Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The speaker undoubtedly states that to secure better jobs,Omega university should terminate student evaluation of professors.The reason stated is unsubstantial and not convincing.Until there is no proper detailed information and statistical data as to why the process has to be eliminated and until he provides evidence to all the questions this can't be a cogent argument.
Firstly,The speaker fails to state the reason behind the new procedure of evaluating teachers.How can a teacher evaluate a student?There is no proper data as to what kind of students were taken in this process for example if a failure student is taken then he negotiates with the teacher and this could effect the future of the child.There is no statistical data of the grades he mentioned like how much exactly were the students performing before and he states as rise in 30 percent among how many students was this percentage calculated?;.
Secondly,The potential employers refers to whom?What made them think that the grades are just boosted by teachers.He fails to give the proper data of rise in grades and is it overall the university or a particular students.The term he mentioned as student achievement refers to what?So does it mean that students evaluate the professors as good so that they could benefit good grades?.Such important data was failed to mention in the argument.
Thirdly,the graduates of omega college and alpha university is compared based on getting jobs and what percentage of students have attended in both colleges could help to analyse the argument more appropriately.What was the actual reason behind the jobs is it because alpha has higher standards? and how can he compare the jobs with the student evaluation process of professors.There is no sufficient data as how many really applied to jobs there might be a chance that they haven't applied as few wish to study further.However the detailed information of students in both colleges is not provided to analyse the argument.
In the conclusion,The speaker failed to mention most of the details such as total number of students and the statistical data of grades before the evaluation process and after the process.As such information are not given with sufficient data this argument can't be deemed to be persuasive.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1879 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.469 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.816 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iven with sufficient data this argument cant be deemed to be persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20380434783 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14340868098 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467391304348 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 22.8473053892 267% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.8586853528 57.8364921388 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 319.166666667 119.503703932 267% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.3333333333 23.324526521 263% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.5 5.70786347227 342% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.25449101796 533% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148721866357 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816147948545 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234214017633 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877034519349 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022236246307 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.7 14.3799401198 234% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.1 48.3550499002 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.197005988 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.77 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.32208582834 124% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 12.3882235529 250% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 11.1389221557 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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