the best way for a society is to prepare its young people for leadership in government,industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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the best way for a society is to prepare its young people for leadership in government,industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

Young people are always running in a competition to achieve things.The reason is right from childhood they are always compared to the other person whether it is on academic marks or physical appearence.They tend to follow the same thing by competiting with other people ever after they reach at a corporate level.

Firstly,i would truly agree with the speaker regarding this issue and the society now has to wakeup and change has to be made right now so that young people would rather work with cooperation than competition.For example there was a kid right from this school he was compared with the other students his parents used to set a competetion with the other students and if he achieves it they would buy something for him. so his mind has made up in that way right from then he always want to compete others and when it comes to corporate life he takes it as a competition with other employees which would annoy them.

Secondly,The young people tend to do things without even thinking of the result whether it would be a positive one or not.For example there was a new employee who was a fresher and right from first day he want to make sure that he compete with others and when he was given a project without anyone's help he tried to finish it as fast as he can and when he presented it the manager taunted him and was stated that before finishing a project make sure you take help and cooperate with other employees to get a good result.

However,when it comes to leadership in government there should be both cooperative and competitive spirit for example a politicaly party has majority of votes while the other one has very low so the better choice would be they cooperate with the other party subsequently so that they can work together for a better improvement in the society.

Thus in the Conclusion,i would suggest that people relatively should know where they should be cooperative and competitive in the respective fields of working rather than being just competitive to be the best among everyone.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76338028169 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6267269567 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49014084507 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 23.0359550562 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.818169389 60.3974514979 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 281.833333333 118.986275619 237% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.1666666667 23.4991977007 252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.5 5.21951772744 316% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217989341118 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122356706329 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291530802899 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129887808221 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340554146731 0.0667264976115 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.6 14.1392134831 216% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 20.05 48.8420337079 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 12.1743820225 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.22 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.2143820225 228% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.7820224719 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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