The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The writer of the sentence above while supporting that Smith Corporation should be stopped in the acquirement of the land for their new hotel have provided arguments that are generally not well-supported and that can be easily refufed. As a matter of fact, at least three logical problem can be easily detected.
First of all, while arguing that the sanctuary has a fundamental role in the survival of the biodiversity of the bird population of Youngtown, no scientific data has been provided in support to his affirmation. Because of that, even if the first part of his reasonament may be true, it is neither supported by any analysis nor past anecdotes and it cannot be confirmed.
Secondly, he fells worried about the construction of the new hotel because of the dramatical consequences that it will have on bird population. However, his fears are not understandable since he has also reported that the Smith Corporation has promised to preserve the Reserve. Furthermore, it is reasonable to say that they are not going to change their mind in the future, because this choice would provide benefit not only to the local community and enviroment, but also to their activity. Indeed, the only well-rounded reason to decide to build an hotel in a place like that is to make the host live a wildlife experience, which would not be possible without preserving it.
Moreover, the last concern of the author takes into account the economy of the community. He is strongly convinced that ruining the wildlife the structure will damage Youngtown tourism as well. Actually, it is right the opposite. Thanks to the building a this new structure far more tourist will be able to go there and admire their Reserve, giving many advantages to the economic scene of the land.
In conclusion, if the writer had reported more data and had made a deeper reasonament, his thesis may be partially correct. However, it is clear that the advantages of the construction of the hotel broadly overweight the drawbacks and that writer's thesis is dramatically without foundations.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1677 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.875 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'problem' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'problems'.
Suggestion: problems
... matter of fact, at least three logical problem can be easily detected. First of all...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... well-rounded reason to decide to build an hotel in a place like that is to make t...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'a' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: a; this
...ht the opposite. Thanks to the building a this new structure far more tourist will be ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...oadly overweight the drawbacks and that writers thesis is dramatically without foundati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01744186047 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90627898603 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549418604651 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0087191605 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.285714286 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5714285714 5.70786347227 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162712515659 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471742513371 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395737444583 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796713259808 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329655791269 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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