The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
In the study, its has been stated that using salicylates which is member of chemical family of aspirin , in food had registered steady decline in number of headaches suffered by average citizens of Mentia. However, the argument fails to account for several other possible explanations.
Firstly, it is mentioned that salicylates are member of same chemical family as aspirin, so the study have assumed that they can be used for the treatment of headaches. The study fails to give any scientific result or proof for the use of salicylates as medicine, it is possible that though salicylates are member of aspirin,s chemical family they are not as effective as aspirin.
Secondly, study founds that salicylates are presents in many foods and added that for the past several decades food processing companies have been using it as food preservatives, bbut the study fails to give some required data i.e. how much amount of salicylates are present in foods? and how many food processing companies are using it as a food preservatives? The study fails to give the exact data needed for the reader. The argument about decline in average number of headaches in participants fails to give the explanation of how many participants are there in the study, if they are less then can it be concluded for all of the citizens? The decline in headaches can also be the effect of better living, better medications by the participants taken as prescribtion from qualified doctors.
Thirdly, by using more and more salicylates in our food it can be possible that it can have some side effects in our body, t his study fails to provide any data on how much amount of salicylates to be consumed. The study have failed to give some scientific proof and datas which is required
In conclusion, the study fails to give some explanations, statistical datas for their argument.
They should have give the scientific proof about use of salicylates, the statistical data about the study is incomplete. The number of participates is to mentioned to make their argument reliable, further information about the amount of salicylates to be consumed so that it can't create any side effects to the consumer to be given in this study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eservatives? The study fails to give the exact data needed for the reader. The ar...
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... it cant create any side effects to the consumer to be given in this study.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'as for', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260545905707 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.171215880893 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967741935484 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0272952853598 0.0520304965353 52% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0446650124069 0.0272364105082 164% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.156327543424 0.125424944231 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0521091811414 0.0416121511921 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84855940248 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0347394540943 0.026700313972 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0893300248139 0.113004496875 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.014888337469 0.0255425247493 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014888337469 0.0127820249294 116% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2225.0 2731.13054187 81% => OK
No of words: 372.0 446.07635468 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9811827957 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.322580645161 0.378187486979 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247311827957 0.287650121315 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19623655914 0.208842608468 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137096774194 0.135150697306 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84855940248 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 207.018472906 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403225806452 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.4610074295 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 26.5714285714 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9343173794 57.7814097925 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.928571429 141.986410481 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.724660767414 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 3.58251231527 558% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.3026113671 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.92857142857 1.8405768891 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.558704296145 0.441005458295 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.190901763555 0.135418324435 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.126426143027 0.0829849096947 152% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.659409175544 0.58762219726 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.221694406055 0.147661913831 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272158849993 0.193483328276 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113641043187 0.0970749176394 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.347407575244 0.42659136922 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0679098059643 0.0774707102158 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347722608465 0.312017818177 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129244397698 0.0698173142475 185% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.33743842365 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 0.0 6.46551724138 0% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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