The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
The letter to the editor for the West Lansburg states that council should not allow the road to built in coastal wetland which is sanctury as per author that might lead to the decline in bidiversity in that area.
by providing reasons. In order to check it's credibility author needs to answer following three questions.
Firstly, does mentioned ancient records providing numbers of tufted groundhog are validated?
May be this records are calculated based on assumption or without any sciinetific formula. In order to consider this ancient records are correct author should validate them first. So author's contention does not hold water.
Secondlty, Eastern Carpenteria and coastal wetland biodiversity and habitat are same? as we know habitat and biodiversity changes from place to place. So it might be the case that Eastern Carpentria and Coastal Wetland bidiversity are different. So comparing these two plcaes without considering biodiversity factor does not hold a water.
Finally, does sea otter population declined only by human interference in Eastern Carpenteria?
There may be other factors in declining population of sea otter it may be because of development of new predators in those area or water polllution. So comapring of sea otter population trend with tufted grouddhog is illogical.
In conclusion, author needs to answer above three question in order to strengthen his argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
No. of Words: 219 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 219 350
No. of Characters: 1157 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.847 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.283 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.8 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.538 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.42 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...anctury as per author that might lead to the decline in bidiversity in that area....
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...e decline in bidiversity in that area. by providing reasons. In order to check it...
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Line 4, column 5, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...of tufted groundhog are validated? May be this records are calculated based on as...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...land biodiversity and habitat are same? as we know habitat and biodiversity change...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'water'.
Suggestion: water
...ering biodiversity factor does not hold a water. Finally, does sea otter population de...
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Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...ause of development of new predators in those area or water polllution. So comapring of se...
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Line 8, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on in order to strengthen his argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1190.0 2260.96107784 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 219.0 441.139720559 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43378995434 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.56307096286 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87685003657 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593607305936 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 705.55239521 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0039151614 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3333333333 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155016030715 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475894469525 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699445373087 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718275653388 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843262781124 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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