The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States Only about 2 percent of customers have complain

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The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter and to increase profitability, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the memorandum the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants suggests that to increase the profitability and to avoid the loss the restaurants should use margarine instead of Butter. He comes to this conclusion based on the several data including a server report. The manager contention might prove true. However, as it stands now, the manager recommendation rests upon three unwarranted assumption which significantly hinders the recommendations credibility.

First of all, the manager presumes that southwestern United states is similar to that of north east, but this might not be true. It is possible that, southwestern people are very rich people who have the money to go to the restaurant eat the butter, while the people in northeast are poor people who do not have enough money to eat in a restaurant. It is also possible the people of the northeast like to go out for food cause the online delivery of other food item are not good. On the other hand the people of southeast have the luxury to get well food in online delivery service. If either of the scenarios are true, then the author contention to extend margarine instead of butter doesn't hold water.

Secondly, the author assumes 98% of people who do not complain have the opportunity to complain, but this might not be true. It is possible that there was not any complaining options available for them to complain hence they did not complain. It is also possible that people got so much angry about alternative food that they thought of eating for their last time hence they did not complain and leave the restaurant for good. If either of the scenarios are true, then author recommendations are significantly weakened.

Finally, the author assumes that the report of the server is plausible, but this might not be the case. It is possible that the server are not telling the truth for the sake of getting a rest. For example, it is possible the demand of butter is really high, and due to high amount of customer the server want to get rid of the customer and hence they lied in report in order to reduce the customer. If this scenario is true, then author's contention to use margarine instead of butter is significantly weakened.

To conclude, the director may be correct in suggesting a alternative decision for business. However, his recommendation is rests upon three unwarranted assumption. If he can provide answer to this problem it will enhance the assertions credibility.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...void the loss the restaurants should use margarine instead of Butter. He comes to...
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...e people of the northeast like to go out for food cause the online delivery of o...
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...wer to this problem it will enhance the assertions credibility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93045563549 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81659346813 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446043165468 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5128745618 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.8 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190071348137 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052171079115 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858592774233 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101327005569 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885509690567 0.0628817314937 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.792 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.763 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.038 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5