The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 is happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
The business manager concludes customers’ satisfaction after changing butter with margin also expresses detecting differences between butter and margin is hard for customers or they use both word as same mean. The passage supports the idea by surveying number of customers’ complaining. At first glance, the passage explanation seems to be strong enough but in deeply revising another explanation can infer.
To begin with, the author assert customers are totally OK with new changing because just 2 percent of them start to complain. To put in the other hand, 98 people out of 100 people don’t feel any problem. It is crystal clear that the conclusion has problems because maybe some persons never complain or they don’t want to leave their comments. For sure, these kinds of customers never come back to Happy Pancake House restaurants also they never suggest the restaurant to anyone else. As a result, the other conclusion is possible and has to consider.
Furthermore, the passage mentions many reports which speaking about no complaining about serving margin instead of butter and say maybe people can’t find the differences between these two. Surely, this explanation can have a lot of alternatives. What about if customers find the differences but like margin and don’t have problem with this change or they prefer to not complaining. It is true that some customer might have problem in detecting but it is not true about every. Therefore, the author had spent more time to find another explanation before concluded this idea.
Without any shadow of doubt, using butter and margin for same meaning can have another problem in proposing in the passage. To be specific, customers may realize changing but it isn’t important for them or maybe they use both butter and margin in their foods and they don’t care about nuances or margin is a healthy food. As a consequences the explanation in conclusion is a flaw and can be different.
In conclusion, I do believe the business manager proposing explanations have strongly alternatives. Since, we can elicit customers don’t leave comments in the case of 98 people don’t have problem also they like this change and don’t distinguishing or they can detect differences but don’t care about using both word for same meaning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 336, Rule ID: A_PLURAL
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
...nuances or margin is a healthy food. As a consequences the explanation in conclusion is a flaw...
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...about using both word for same meaning.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, as to, in conclusion, speaking about, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2513368984 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87583221614 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494652406417 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8527440463 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.529411765 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.70786347227 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0690873550573 0.218282227539 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265933659398 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417738887618 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0432493520871 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195733716227 0.0628817314937 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1855 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.67 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.103 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5