"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
The author concludes investing in Consolidated Industries especially home heating oil based on using oil as a major fuel in northeastern United States. The author supports his statement by evidences of prediction, expressing that this weather pattern will continue and new building in this area is going to increase. At first glance these assumptions seem to be strong enough to persuade us to accept his thought, but when we start to revise the argument deeply we can find some flaws and hidden problems in his assumptions.
To begin with, there is no evidence that prove people in that area use oil as a main fuel for heating in the last season. It is true that they have used oil traditionally but we should consider that maybe, people living in this region tried to replace oil with new type of energy such as gas, light, etc. Surely, understanding the measure of oil, used in last season concern strongly with argument conclusion also we should consider changing sources of energy leads to decrease depending of oil and it makes difficulty in the investment, therefore there is no reason to investment in Consolidated Industries.
Furthermore, there is a problem in not discussing type of energy in new houses. The passage asserts that many new houses are being built in the region, in addition next year is going to be very cold too, therefore invest in oil is going to be good suggestion, but if we want to take look at the argument precise, we can’t find anything about the type of energy, used in these homes. If architectures, building these homes try to replace oil with other type of energy like electricity, the prediction of demanding oil has faced serious problems. To provide more support, the author should mention the sources of energy using in these new houses because it wouldn’t feasible for us to invest in business which isn’t going to use in new housing any more.
Last but not least, the investment advice is chosen based on prediction of climate forecaster, which isn’t enough strong to strength the suggestion. Let us judge this suggestion from another point of view, what happen if the climate forecasters make mistake in their prediction which is expressing, weather pattern will continue for several years. Under such a circumstance, since, no one in that area needs oil for heating home, we have to prepare to bankrupt in the investment. Without shadow of doubt, investing is a risky job and investor can’t put money in a business according to suggestion which dramatically unpredictable.
In conclusion, the author proposal to investment in Consolidate Industries especially home heating oil is unconvincing. Because, he didn’t mention the demanding of oil in last year and the kind of energy using in new building in intended area. Furthermore, mistake in predicting weather is inevitable, as isn’t good reason to compel us to accept the suggestion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2347 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05383022774 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91262333616 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488612836439 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7702058609 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.588235294 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4117647059 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209851270694 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780677120923 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760205320247 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122878948621 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478546280086 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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