In the give prompt Mayor Harrison Smith jones plans to build multi-million dollar subway system to reduce the traffic congestion, the word used to describe the traffic congestion as "notorious" it self says how bad is the current traffic status. But the prompt fails to give the solid reasons how building subway system will solve the current traffic problem. The below question's should be answered before coming to the conclusion that building the subway system can reduce the traffic and the people can travel hassle free.
First of all, the Mayer and the responsible team should make some research on what is causing so much of traffic? Is the traffic congestion is temporary or is it on the specific occasions. Is it because of people are not using the public transport effectively? Are roads on the high way are good enough to handle this kind of traffic? or Is it because people are not used to the other transportation services other than using there own vehicle. Is traffic because of the daily commuters or due to some industrial growth in that particular area.
Secondly, The statement in the prompt which says that "residents are complaining about the inconsistent of the buses" weakens the entire assumption that subway system will solve the problem completely, may be just proving the proper and frequent public transport are sufficient to solve the problem ? does people are aware of the service provided by the local commute services provided by the transport authorities. are the current buses are enough to server the population in that particular region.Any trial runs or experiments are conducted to tackle the issue ?
The initiative taken from the Mayor Harrison Smith Jones to build the multi-million dollar subway is very good idea, it shows the concern of him to solve the traffic problem and the increase the productivity of the worker. But before proceeding in building the subway system, Proper research has to be conducted based on the factual data and local authorities input on this. If all data provided and proper research shows that constructing the subway will reduce the traffic will immensely help the people.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1761 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.947 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.923 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...fic congestion as 'notorious' it self says how bad is the current traffic sta...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...will solve the current traffic problem. the below questions should be answered befo...
^^^
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
... enough to handle this kind of traffic? or Is it because people are not used to th...
^^
Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...ransportation services other than using there own vehicle. Is trafic because of the daily...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...t are sufficient to solve the problem ? does people are aware of the service provide...
^^^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
... provided by the transport authorities. are the current buses are anough to server ...
^^^
Line 5, column 511, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Any
...he population in that perticuler region.Any trial runs or experiempts are conducted...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12078651685 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81952075057 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480337078652 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2774025129 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.533333333 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292319021591 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870617522075 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108065462705 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175239007089 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137525645011 0.0628817314937 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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