The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Smith Jones.
"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
Mayor Harrison's idea that curtailing traffic congestion in major areas of Briggsville's will direclty bring about a positive increase in worker productivity and improve the towns economy hinges upon a plethora of assumptions that needs to be addressed for the plan to be successful and see light at the end of the tunnel.
Firstly, we are told that the Briggsville town has traffic congestion issues but is the town facing traffic issues or just a small proporation connecting between town's major industry hub affected by it. There needs to be more facts presented that confers that conecting major downtown areas are going to help ease the congesation issues. Also, are the major traffic prone being covered in the Subway roadmap, if not than, there might be a general decrease of motorist on the roads but its effect with diminutive.
Secondly, we are told that buses are the old form of transportation with people complaining about the incosistencies of the buses and safety. There needs to be more thought put towards understanding whether the above reasons are pushing people to restort to taking out there own vehichles on the road adding to the congestion problem. It would be fesible to try and improve the current mode of transport : buses in our case and see if this help alleviates traffic issues. The idea is to promote the use of public transport and not using personal mode.
Most importantly, the key idea behind implementing this multi-milion dollar plan is that, this will directly increase the productivity of the worker and increase the economy of the town. We have been provided no statistics or reserach that corroborates with the above conclusion. There needs to be a detailed survey conducted by the industries to find and understand what would best helps increasing the producvity of the worker -- Are the worker complacent in general?, do they use traffic congestion as an excuse of coming late to work?, Will increasing perks and incentives help them devote there energy at work? .
With that said, for the Mayor's conclusion to actually happen, the office must first help anwer some questions and run a thorough research before investing a millions of dollar's in haste.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1800 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.945 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.745 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
... in worker productivity and improve the towns economy hinges upon a plethora of assum...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...pushing people to restort to taking out there own vehichles on the road adding to the con...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...gestion problem. It would be fesible to try and improve the current mode of transport :...
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Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to increase' or 'increase'.
Suggestion: to increase; increase
...nd and understand what would best helps increasing the producvity of the worker -- Are the...
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Line 7, column 617, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... help them devote there energy at work? . With that said, for the Mayors conc...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'thorough research'.
Suggestion: thorough research
...first help anwer some questions and run a thorough research before investing a millions of dollars ...
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: A_HUNDREDS[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'a million'
Suggestion: a million
...un a thorough research before investing a millions of dollars in haste.
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a million' or simply 'millions'?
Suggestion: a million; millions
...un a thorough research before investing a millions of dollars in haste.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05494505495 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77428356843 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56043956044 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1969174161 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.333333333 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110981150366 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036960374479 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419490436405 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696688111025 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411240502872 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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