The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
According to the memorandum from the president of the Humana University in order to increase the enrollment and solve the problems of budget deficits at Humana University the students should initiate and promote online degree like those at Omni. To support these recommendations, they also provide some legitimate logical reasons. This recommendation might to make cogent case at first glance but on further scrutiny, it will be easily persuaded that it's the credible matters. The evidence that is based on the recommendation should be properly evaluated and three questions must be asked before applying the recommendations.
To begin, the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by Omni university increased by 50%. Furthermore, the Omni university administrators decreased the class room spaces and dormitory expenditures because of online instructions of internet. The university authority can reduce their classroom space or expenditure by other reasons. Thus, they can limit the number of students in the classroom, they may be exploited the classroom in 2 or three days, other days they can use the university field or research lab. So this information is totally flawed.
Furthermore, the resident prematurely assume that Humana university fails to grow the student’s enrollment for the last three years, despite of having large buildings. Thus, it may be the reputation of this university is not good or the administrations, alumni or faculty members are not properly oriented and they perpetually failed to ameliorate their academic qualifications. However, the faculty members may be not well qualified, this university may be situated in a local area or students do not get their study resources within proper times. If either of these recommendations has merit, then the conclusion of the argument is significantly weakened and the conclusion does not hold water.
In conclusion, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on some unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the two questions mentioned above and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systemic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendations. Otherwise I will not be easily persuaded of the authors claim.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.288 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.105 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.598 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
According to the memorandum from the pre...
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Line 1, column 467, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...utiny, it will be easily persuaded that its the credible matters. The evidence that...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...before applying the recommendations. To begin, the number of students who enr...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... this information is totally flawed. Furthermore, the resident prematurely as...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd the conclusion does not hold water. In conclusion, as it stands now is consi...
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Line 6, column 349, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...bility of the proposed recommendations. Otherwise I will not be easily persuaded of the a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41551246537 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19679831928 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559556786704 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.420297766 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.1875 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25158158848 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853594033244 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138774114389 0.0701772020484 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139209148782 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090785826763 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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