The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In response to the consideration of "petition" on banning cell phones in sidewalks of Centerville numerous evidences have been regarded, although there remains certain questions to be answered before coming to any conclusions. Based on the assumptions stated in the prompt, without justifying each of these, it would be nothing but a injustice to ban cell phones of the peasants of the mentioned city as cell phones have become a part and parcel of daily lives wherever we are in.
First of all, it is assumed that the increment in the assaults, damages and disruptions are the results os usage of cell phones in sidewalks. The author is missing a point here. That is to say, there may be innumerable reasons working behind the antagonism in the city. Who knows there are certain groups who are willing doing these to the peasants to fullfill their aims. They might do the same even if the cell phones are banned from using in the sidewalks, may be in disguise of some other ways. Now more importantly - if any individual on the sidewalks of the city is in any kind of urgency then how can he or she could contact with his or her collegues far away from them if cell phones are not alloweed to use in sidewalks, considering the uprise of indignant customaries in the city. In this case, cell phones are must in the sidewalks let alone be banned.
Second of all, it is assumed that texting in the cell phones are slowing down the traffic and also increases the tendency of accident in the road as people become vulnerable to bump into other walkers. But this assumption can be carefully hedged providing that the city council prepares seperate walkways for slow moving vehicles and fast moving ones. As a result there will be slight chance of one to to getting into path of another one. Providing these barriers can decrease thew potentials of future accidents. So, the assumption that texting in the cell phone is somewhat causing the vulnerability is somewhat pressumptous.
Lastly, it might not a good idea to compare the cell phone ban in the Middletown with that of the Centerville because there might be different scenerio with the pedestrians. There are may be people who are not following the regulations provided by the city council of Middletown even after maintaining the above stated measures.
So overall, looking at the considerations and logical reasoning stated above it might not be wise to come into any conclusion without answering the questions.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2004 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.738 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.009 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... each of these, it would be nothing but a injustice to ban cell phones of the pea...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'results'' or 'result's'?
Suggestion: results'; result's
...saults, damages and disruptions are the results os usage of cell phones in sidewalks. T...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...king behind the antagonism in the city. Who knows there are certain groups who are ...
^^^
Line 3, column 743, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...loweed to use in sidewalks, considering the uprise of indignant customaries in the city. I...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...w moving vehicles and fast moving ones. As a result there will be slight chance of...
^^
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...sult there will be slight chance of one to to getting into path of another one. Provi...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, look, may, second, so, then, kind of, as a result, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87706855792 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80432264203 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520094562648 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5608145882 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.352941176 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0819246133944 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267399705696 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354069257079 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0453270070295 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251999230508 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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