There seems to be a recommendation from the board of directors of Monarch Books regarding the inclusion of a café inside the book store, such that, it can eke more revenue to the store by pulling more customers to the shop. At first, it appears to be a better idea to attract more customers, but the myopic board of directors fails to expound certain other facts that could be catastrophic to the revenue of Monarch Books. The following argument explains the cause and effect anticipated on the inauguration of new coffee shop inside the book store.
Primarily, a bibliophile would never love to have food or beverages when they indulge deeply in to the books. It will be assumed to be a major distraction for book lovers. Since, Monarch books already has a large customer base, it is unnecessary to spend on establishing a coffee shop inside the book store. This can greatly affect the serene and blissful ambience for the customers. Not everybody loves food while reading or examining the books they love to read. It varies depending upon the individual's choice on case to case basis. Moreover, there can be an increase in noise pollution with the café workers, who are expected to take orders and process each customer's requirement within the scheduled timeframe. This can lead to a ruckus inside the book shop. Consequently, the customers are prone to being annoyed and lose temper. They will have no other choice but to leave the book store and find any other way to order books.
The directors have mentioned about the plummet in children's population within the age group of 10 based on a recent survey. Monarch books must analyze whether the survey is reliable. The report could be fallacious. The book store cannot abruptly decimate the Children's section as a book lover is invented from the very rudimentary stage of life. Children's can attribute to the majority of the revenue in future. The prognostications by the board of directors on children's section is clearly inappropriate. In fact, Monarch books must consider expanding the children's section with plethora of options and eclectic genres to motivate younger minds. Thus, creating new book worms can really contribute to the inclination in it's revenue for near future.
Finally, comparing the revenue report of regal book store can never tantamount to the customers and revenue that Monarch books already posses. The other aspects must also be discussed regarding the Regal bookshop. Did regal bookshop really liquidated the children's section to accommodate the café inside? Regal book store must be very recently established with meagre amount of books for all sections of people including the children, and preplanned to incubate the café inside the store. This is much more easier than upgrading an already established book store like the Monarch books. Furthermore, Regal book shop must have only earned revenue from the coffee shop. There could have been a loss to the books section, while just entertaining only the expresso section. Hence, a revenue out of coffee shop cannot be juxtaposed with the income eked through selling books for more than two decades.
To conclude, upgradation to bookshop can be achieved through technology. It is fair enough to start a new website for Monarch books and sell online. Thus, it is viable for them to establish their brand globally and attract more customers worldwide. Hence, the predictions made by the board of directors can only incur loss to the monarch books rather than enhancing their business.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 33 15
No. of Words: 583 350
No. of Characters: 2886 1500
No. of Different Words: 269 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.914 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.616 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.622 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.485 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.277 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... could be catastrophic to the revenue of Monarch Books. The following argument ex...
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Line 2, column 662, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...xpected to take orders and process each customers requirement within the scheduled timefr...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ttribute to the majority of the revenue in future. The prognostications by the board of d...
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Line 4, column 502, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...the café inside the store. This is much more easier than upgrading an already established b...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s rather than enhancing their business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, thus, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2942.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 583.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04631217839 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65848613372 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463121783877 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 915.3 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9627524119 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1515151515 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57575757576 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366538197321 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966148649183 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829953608135 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234757972038 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467151629304 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 98.500998004 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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