In the letter from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books, it is stated that Monarch Books should open a cafe in its store by replacing the children's book session to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books. The directors had come to this recommendation based on a recent national census about young children as well as an action of its competitor -- Regal Books. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, there are three questions that must be answered.
First of all, can a national census can accurately reflect the exact circumstances of the neighborhood where Monarch Book open its store. In other words, is the city also has a decline in the number of children under ten that is similar to the whole country? It is possible that the circumstances of the city is not comparable to most of the other cities -- perhaps the city has the highest quality of elementary school education resources that attracted many parents migrate to the city. Therefore, even there is a reducement in children's population in the country as a whole, an increment is ocurring in the city. If this scenario has merit, the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened
Secondly, are mostly those consumers of children's books are children? The directors prematurely assume that the population of the children is strongly connected to the sales of the children's books. However, this may not be the case. Perhaps most of the books are bought by the children's parents. With an increasing number of parents realize the importance of childhood education for their kids, the sales of children's books are steadily increasing every year. Moreover, some of the comic books which are regards as children's books may be widely accepted by the adults. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
Finally, are Regal Books and Monarch Books roughly comparable? It is possible that Regal Books located in the CBD of the city where most of the office employees are coffee consumers, whereas Monarch Books located in a community where most of the residents do not have a habit of drinking coffee. Since Monarch Books has an excellent reputation for its wide selection of books, replacing the children's books section may cause the discontent of the consumers, while Regel Book does not have such a risk.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, it is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. if the directors are able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence(perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to open a cafe in the book store.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2236 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.103 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...eadily increasing every year. Moreover, some of the comic books which are regards as childr...
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Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument does not hold water. Finally, are Regal Books and Monarch Books roughl...
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Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. if the directors are able to answer the th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00656455142 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81833689682 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46170678337 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2351282156 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.421052632 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0526315789 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73684210526 5.70786347227 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262695361686 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786801300331 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895395697454 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156683866011 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993770598631 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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