There is no doubt that all parents what their child to have a promising future. When it comes to helping their teenage children prepare adult life, an increasing number of parents now encourage their kids to take a part-time job. From my perspective, having some part-time work experience can help the children in many aspects.
Firstly, some real-world work experience can help diminish the gap between the current study and work in the future for teenagers. By taking a part-time job, teenagers can use the knowledge they learn from school to solve the problems. These can help them become more practical and develop a way of critical thinking, which make them more competitive for their future job. My cousin's experience is a compelling example. He worked as a part-time technician in a computer store for three years when he was a college student. This job allowed him to use the knowledge he acquired to deal with many different electronic problems. This experience helped him get a job in a big company after graduate despite his average academic report as they needed a graduate with extensive knowledge on fixing electronic devices.
Secondly, taking a part-time job can help cultivate the personalities of independence and perseverance for the young generations. In a real part-time job, teenagers cannot rely on their parents and teachers anymore and they have to tackle many difficulties by themselves. My own experience exemplifies this idea. When I was studying computer science at the university, my father suggested that I found a part-time job which is closed to my background. I then chose to work for a small outsource project of building a website. In this temporary job, I encountered many program problems that never told in the class and I solved these problems by reading many reference books and searching the similar problem on the internet. Through this job, I not only became more economical independent by earning money by myself but also became patience in dealing with difficulties.
Finally, the part-time job provides excellent opportunities for teenagers to practice their social skills.
From example, image a 15 year ago boy, who is very shy and afraid of communicating with strangers, taking a part-time job in a convenience store. Because he has to chat with the customers every day, he has plenty of chances to polish his communication skills. So constantly, this boy becomes more sociable. There is also research found that those young students who had a part-time job experience are more socially active than those who do not have such experience.
From what has been discussed above, we could safely draw the conclusion that taking a part-time job has many advantages for teenage children, so parents so encourage their kids to have this experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12227074236 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88379267252 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526200873362 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0095366878 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9130434783 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298947819475 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924095367372 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811986306072 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183436337065 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593665967744 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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