TPO 24 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People show different attitudes towards how parents should prepare their kids for future adult life. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that teenagers should be encouraged to apply for a part-time job as a way to succeed in the labor market. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, working part-time equips juveniles with core skills for their upcoming careers. They will learn how to prepare sound presentations and how to present them effectively in front of other people. Besides, young people will be taught to arrange their time scientifically as they must arrange their daily agenda carefully to incorporate diverse activities. All those skills eventually contribute to their future success. My own experience exemplifies this idea. When I was studying at the university, my father suggested that I found a part-time job which is closed to my background. I then worked for a chocolate shop near my house for three hours a day after class. This temporary job was to blame for my negotiating skills as well as the improvement of my conversation ability in English.
Secondly, experience acquired in part-time job enriches youngsters' curriculum vitae which is usually weak. Fresh graduates are normally lack of real-life working experience. Therefore, the knowledge that they have gained in their previous short-term jobs plays an important role in attracting the attention of prospective employers. My cousin´s experience is a compelling example. He worked as a technician in a computer store for three years when he was a college student and this experience helped him to grip the attention of his current employer despite my cousin´s average academic report as they needed a graduate with extensive knowledge on fixing electronic devices.
In conclusion, working part-time is certainly pivotal in young people´ success in their adult life. This is because it helps them to gain vital skills and broaden their profile.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27725856698 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.965287016 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.5860265 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1111111111 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227985842798 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733616758135 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557065307642 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163121551556 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768320469458 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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