In this recomendation, the director argues that in order to improve the productivity of the employess in Acme Publishing Company, the president should afford them for the Easy Read Course, which was benefit to the company. The aurhor illustrates several edivence to prove the suggestion. Firstly, there were many other companies having their employees to attend this course.Secondly, some of the employees made impressive performance when they finished this course. Thirdly, compared with the benefits that the course brings in, the tuition fee was reasonal for each employee. While the suggestion is problematic in that there are some loopholes in it, more evidence are needed as those in the recommendation are not convicing, we need to evaluate this argument carefully.
To begin with, whether the other companies could be compared with the Acme Publishing Compnay is still in question. As the author does not tell us what kinds of the other companies are, we could not draw the conclusion without this essential reference. In another word, if the other companies were not in the same publishing field, the evidence would not be compelling due to the irrelavance. So more infromation about all of these companies are needed to prove the argument.
Another point is the scale of the students attending to the class is not given, so we could not evaluate the effect of the course. As the author cites two cases of the students while how about all the other students' performance is not told by the author. As we could not evaluate the average performance of the students, the successful cases metioned by the director could be unusual as maybe the other sutdents could not make the same progress like the two graduates metioned in the argument. Moreover, as there are only two successfull cases cited by the director, what made them make so much progress is not given. Maybe they were just very talented while all the others could not be so successfull.
In addtion, the comparing between the benefit to the company and the tuition fee is not convicing. Firstly, we do not know how many kinds of jobs in the Acme Publishing Company thus wheher all of the employees should learn this coures is still in question. As maybe there are some employees who do not need to get so mych information in a short time like the guradians of the company. Secondly, we do not konw the totall number of the staff in this company, even if $500 for each employee is a small, the totall expense could also be very high if there are many employees.
In conclusion, the advice given by the director is not convicing as the reasoning in this arguement is not compelling. To strenthen the author's argument, he/she should make more survey to gather more evidence to prove the effect for all of the employees attending in this course, also, he /she should find more compelling data .
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this recomendation, the director argues that in order to improve the productivity of the employess in Acme Publishing Company, the president should afford them for the Easy Read Course, which was benefit to the company.
Error: recomendation Suggestion: recommendation
Error: employess Suggestion: employers
Sentence: The aurhor illustrates several edivence to prove the suggestion.
Error: aurhor Suggestion: author
Error: edivence Suggestion: evidence
Sentence: Thirdly, compared with the benefits that the course brings in, the tuition fee was reasonal for each employee.
Error: reasonal Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While the suggestion is problematic in that there are some loopholes in it, more evidence are needed as those in the recommendation are not convicing, we need to evaluate this argument carefully.
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: In another word, if the other companies were not in the same publishing field, the evidence would not be compelling due to the irrelavance.
Error: irrelavance Suggestion: irrelevance
Sentence: So more infromation about all of these companies are needed to prove the argument.
Error: infromation Suggestion: information
Sentence: As we could not evaluate the average performance of the students, the successful cases metioned by the director could be unusual as maybe the other sutdents could not make the same progress like the two graduates metioned in the argument.
Error: metioned Suggestion: mentioned
Error: sutdents Suggestion: students
Sentence: Moreover, as there are only two successfull cases cited by the director, what made them make so much progress is not given.
Error: successfull Suggestion: successful
Sentence: Maybe they were just very talented while all the others could not be so successfull.
Error: successfull Suggestion: successful
Sentence: In addtion, the comparing between the benefit to the company and the tuition fee is not convicing.
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: Firstly, we do not know how many kinds of jobs in the Acme Publishing Company thus wheher all of the employees should learn this coures is still in question.
Error: wheher Suggestion: whether
Error: coures Suggestion: course
Sentence: As maybe there are some employees who do not need to get so mych information in a short time like the guradians of the company.
Error: guradians Suggestion: guardians
Error: mych Suggestion: much
Sentence: Secondly, we do not konw the totall number of the staff in this company, even if 500 for each employee is a small, the totall expense could also be very high if there are many employees.
Error: konw Suggestion: know
Error: totall Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In conclusion, the advice given by the director is not convicing as the reasoning in this arguement is not compelling.
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: To strenthen the author's argument, he/she should make more survey to gather more evidence to prove the effect for all of the employees attending in this course, also, he /she should find more compelling data .
Error: strenthen Suggestion: strengthen
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2316 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.727 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.544 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.109 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
...g their employees to attend this course.Secondly, some of the employees made impressive ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 385, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ployees to attend this course.Secondly, some of the employees made impressive performance w...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 728, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the recommendation are not convicing, we need to evaluate this argument carefu...
^^
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the other companies were not in the same publishing field, the evidence would not...
^^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... not evaluate the effect of the course. As the author cites two cases of the stude...
^^
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... students while how about all the other students performance is not told by the author. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 567, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...successfull cases cited by the director, what made them make so much progress is ...
^^
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...the Acme Publishing Company thus wheher all of the employees should learn this coures is s...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ent is not compelling. To strenthen the authors argument, he/she should make more surve...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 234, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...r more evidence to prove the effect for all of the employees attending in this course, als...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 327, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he /she should find more compelling data .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87909836066 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69068281401 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430327868852 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.289401561 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.05 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179366389552 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535183293513 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543576267499 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101414025049 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682795608825 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.