The speaker in the newsletter to the West Meria Public Health Council, avers to have
found a cure to absenteeism in its schools and workplaces. The claim is that the use of
Ichthaid — a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil - which provides immunity from
cold will improve the overall health, the cold being the most frequent reason of absence.
The argument relies on several unjustified assumptions, weak analogy and is deficient in
establishing valid statistical supports for the claim presented. Moreover, the study report
mentioned is vague, the sample size and demographics of the same not specified and the inference
drawn is confusing signs of a thing for the thing itself.
The speaker rests on a study report of East Meria where high consumption possibly
resulted in lower reported cold treatments. Firstly, the relation between East Merian
and West Meria is unclear - their geography, political condition, economic state etc.
Secondly, there is no mention of the surveying body that actually conducted the survey.
Thirdly, "High consumption of fish" is too vague to be considered apropos of a relevant
discussion. Maybe, it is likely that there the doctors in East Meria charge a hefty
fee for the treatment such that the locals cannot afford. Proper connection has to be established
between both the regions before drawing parallels.
Moreover, even if the high consumption of fish caused a reduction in cold, whether was it the cause or
just a coincidence has to be noted too. The East Merian's might be taking extra precaution
regarding or their health, exercising more, eating healthy - an overall salubrious lifestyle.
Also, there is not any mention of the sample and the period on which the study was conducted.
The exact demographics of the sample population, sample size has to shown to authenticate the research.
Whether or not the control group was incorporated goes unmentioned too.
Furthermore, the affordablity of the supplement is unknown. Will an average bloke of West Meria
be able to buy these pills for daily consumption? The prevailing economic condition is an essential
factor in determining this. The motive behind the proposition is muddy as well. The speaker could
well be a partner in the fish oil supplement industry, and the recommendation of the West Meria
Health Council for daily consumption of the pills is surely going to soar his sales. All these
evidences need to be warranted before making the statement of recommendation.
All in all, to prescribe the fish oil supplement as the panacea for battling low attendance,
a host of significant evidences need to be substantiated. Robust vindication has to be provided.
Flimsy research studies, vague analogies, extended conclusions, and unjustified motives have to
be inspected before taking any executive steps in the promotion of the fish oil supplement.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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flaws:
more arguments wanted.
1. whether it is a good way to prevent colds
2. whether it can lower absenteeism.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2335 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.098 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g the most frequent reason of absence. The argument relies on several unjustified ...
^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stified assumptions, weak analogy and is deficient in establishing valid statis...
^^
Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions, weak analogy and is deficient in establishing valid statistical supports ...
^^^
Line 6, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...im presented. Moreover, the study report mentioned is vague, the sample size and ...
^^^
Line 14, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e to be considered apropos of a relevant discussion. Maybe, it is likely that the...
^^^
Line 15, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the doctors in East Meria charge a hefty fee for the treatment such that the loca...
^^^
Line 20, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Merians might be taking extra precaution regarding or their health, exercising mo...
^^^
Line 23, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to shown to authenticate the research. Whether or not the control group was incorporat...
^^^^^^^^
Line 24, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...to shown to authenticate the research. Whether or not the control group was incorporated goes...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 28, column 81, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ehind the proposition is muddy as well. The speaker could well be a partner in the...
^^^
Line 35, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lusions, and unjustified motives have to be inspected before taking any executive...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2469.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37908496732 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00643428987 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535947712418 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6883878021 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.875 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 32.0 5.15768463074 620% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170340779504 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441686847143 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646480249379 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0412314285768 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542482538274 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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