GRE Argument:
The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of Brindleburg to the city council.
"Two years ago, the town of Seaside Vista opened a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Since then, the Seaside Vista Tourism Board has reported a 20% increase in visitors. In addition, local banks reported a steep rise in the number of new business loan applications they received this year. The amount of tax money collected by Seaside Vista has also increased, allowing the town to announce plans to improve Seaside Vista's roads and bridges. We recommend building a similar golf course and resort hotel in Brindleburg. We predict that this project will generate additional tax revenue that the city can use to fund much-needed public improvements."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
it might seem logical to make the conclusion that the author made, but if we look at it carefully. However, there are three questions that should be answered to evaluate the recommendation.
First of all, we have to question if there weren't any other type of factors that could impact on the number of tourists visting the city. For example, if there was a tv show that advertise the town, which led into popularity as a tourist attraction, buidling golf course and resort wouldn't be the effective way, especially when contruction cost is higher than advertising fee.
Second, we have to question if 20 percent increase of vistors are valid amount of improvement. if the previous number of visitors in the town were less than 100, it would just indicate 20 more people visiting after spending tremendous amount of money to build the places. this question is related to the another question, which is whether the city increased the tax rate or not. if there were only small amount of increase of visitiors but large increase in the tax rate, larger amount of tax collected by the city aren't related to the making the places.
Third, we have to ask if the brindleburg has a similar environment as seaside vista. Because if seaside vista has a warmer climate and easier transporation system for people who want to visit this place to use, building a golf course and resort hotel wouldn't have similar effects that seaside vista had. if brindleburg has a colder weather that people don't prefer to play golf, it would impact the city's finance negatively.
In conclusion, those three questions have to be dealt to evaluate the writer's recommendation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1334 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.664 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.431 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.775 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it might seem logical to make the conclusi...
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Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...st of all, we have to question if there werent any other type of factors that could im...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...action, buidling golf course and resort wouldnt be the effective way, especially when c...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...istors are valid amount of improvement. if the previous number of visitors in the ...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...us amount of money to build the places. this question is related to the another ques...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...the city increased the tax rate or not. if there were only small amount of increas...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ger amount of tax collected by the city arent related to the making the places. Th...
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Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...brindleburg has a similar environment as seaside vista. Because if seaside vista ...
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Line 7, column 253, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...building a golf course and resort hotel wouldnt have similar effects that seaside vista...
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Line 7, column 306, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...similar effects that seaside vista had. if brindleburg has a colder weather that p...
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Line 7, column 354, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...leburg has a colder weather that people dont prefer to play golf, it would impact th...
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Line 9, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...stions have to be dealt to evaluate the writers recommendation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 281.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90747330961 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64942735429 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572953736655 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.000204248 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.916666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137853020147 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483719958241 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689830441531 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0646795004703 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936745397591 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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