If people disregard the great works of the past it is because these works no longer answer the needs of the present

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If people disregard the great works of the past, it is because these works no longer answer the needs of the present.

people might wonder what the great works mean. To examine this claim in detail, I narrowed the meaning of great works to something that people achieve in sports, politics and academic field. As I examined achievements in those three areas, I do not support this claim.

First, people have seen many failures of sports stars due to their unethical private lives. For example, Tiger Woods, who was the most famous golf player in the past is now disgraceful star who is only remembered by his wrongful behaviors. As we see, his great achievement as a golf player hasn't changed since his unethical life styles does not change the fact that he won many games and contests. however people disregard his achivement, not because his success as a golf player does not become good example for younger golf player who want to learn his technique, but because of his unethical acts.

Secondly, there are people who does not respect the great works of the past politicians, claiming that their acts didn't change thier lives. For example, there are people in south korea who miss the time when Koreans are under dictatorship, and disrespect heros who achieved democracy. In this case, they are disrespecting their works because of thier ignorance, since it is apparent that democracy changed south korea in a much better society regarding wel-fare and economics. Considering the fact that still virtue of democracy provide answers to many people in south korea in that it allows them to have freedom, people who disrespect the great works of the past are doing so because of their ignorance that prevent them from understanding true meaning of the great works of the past.
Finally, in Academia, there are theories that were once great but now disrespceted, such as Freud's theory. however, it is not mainly because this does not answer people's question of human minds, it is because of its huge flaws that later turned out. this can somewhat support the claim in the passage but I insist that even flawed theories are basis of other great works made these days, it is still somewhat answering the present and I think that the big flaws were main reason why people disregard some theories.
In conclusion, I used examples for three fields to check if the claim can be true, which I denied using my examples.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86989795918 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43951055228 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520408163265 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1662552464 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.266666667 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.21951772744 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316534292653 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108106433428 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961047079796 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15564609382 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102929730871 0.0667264976115 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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