People’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
it might seem true that people's attitudes are affected more by their own relevant situations as what their job is, what their family income is or who they are friends with. however, if we compare one society to another society, we can see that difference in society has a stronger impacts on each individuals' attitudes.
First, each society has its own rules, especially when it is a nation they have a laws, which affects people' attitudes the most. For example citizens in western countries' are mostly more liberal than people living in asian countires. even people who think that they are conservative are still less conservative than people from middle east asia, who think they are liberal. For example, majority of people living in the usa accepts homosexaul relationship, even who are supporting Republican. however, majority of Koreans who support liberal parties don't support homosexaul relationship, because society as a whole don't support it.
Some people can say that people still people's daily attitudes are determined by immediate situation or surroundings. it might see reasonable when we only look at attitudes in the short term. however, when we observe people's behaviors in the long run, it is deterimined by a society. For example, one person might react to asian people with discriminatory ideas, because of underlined bias towards asian people unconsciously. however, for example, in the usa, as people are more focusing on racism, many people are consciously not to discriminate other races. people's short term attitudes might not change significantly, but in the long run, people's bahaviors have been changed and will change according to what the society pursue.
In conclusion, I claim that attitudes are affected by a society because rules that a society has have strong impacts on people's behaviors which can be easily found by comparing different society that believes other rules. And I am insisting it also because even if it doesn't seem immediate situations have more impacts on people's attitudes in the short term, when we see the long term result, it is determining people's behaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, still, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19590643275 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78578255672 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485380116959 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.743372193 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.466666667 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359391107712 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125293030013 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798288602472 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230383869409 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373849984507 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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