'A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.' Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The purpose of a national curriculum is to make its students have general knowledge enough both for their life and their college lives. I agree that a national curriculum will make students better prepared for their college lives in that most students will have similar backgrounds of knowledge, but making all students follow the same universal curriculum will make side effects. In my essay, I will talk about why I agree with requiring a national curriculum and what should be done to strengthen the author’s claim.
Some might disagree with the idea of making mandatory national curriculum in that it will harm teachers’ own profession, which is teaching students in the way they think is proper to their students. I agree to this claim in some extent since it will be harder to change curriculum according to the level of students they teach at schools, which mean there could be students who cannot keep up with materials but teachers will not focus on them since they have to follow the curriculum, which also means declining flexibility at schools. However, since these days, many students are going to university that most people are applying to take SAT or ACT, having a national curriculum will make students learn materials needed for the tests at school, regardless of which high schools they are attending. Most people are taking the same test but if there aren’t universal curriculum that covers materials on the tests, it will confuse many students. Therefore, to provide students a place to prepare those tests, a national curriculum is needed.
However, having single national curriculum can waste time of students who pursue different majors. In the passage, it assumes that a national curriculum is for students who are willing to go to college, but there are still many students who don’t go to college, who still need mandatory education. For them, making them follow the same curriculum as students who are preparing for SAT or ACT will lower their interests in learning. So it will be efficient to prepare an alternative curriculum for them to learn materials, but still similar over the nation. Also, there should be several more curriculums because it is reasonable to provide different curriculum to students who pursue majors related to math and science than to students pursuing literature.
In conclusion, I agree with the claim that there should be national curriculum, but there have to be several options available to students who want to achieve different goals in their lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11325301205 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71601006961 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450602409639 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9411069958 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.571428571 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6428571429 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267720758751 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119335456839 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319438711502 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181760765203 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328364828529 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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