'A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.' Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A curriculum is a guideline about what to teach in schools. The author claims that a nation has to make their students learn the same materials using the guideline. It might see as a good policy but there are some side-effects of making a national curriculum.
First, subjects as history, social studies and politics, which can't avoid including subjective opinions in the materials, will be exposed to danger of being controlled by a government. For example, if a government chooses a specific text book to make its student follow its curriculum, students will only be exposed to ideas that the government thinks proper to learn. If it is science or math, requiring its students to follow it wouldn't make side effects, since science and math knowledge don't change according to textbooks nor curriculum. So it might seem attractive to require its students to follow the same national curriculum, but side effects of learning subjects that must include subjective opinions through identical curriculum and textbooks will have more harmful consequences.
Second, it will take teachers' authority to teach what they think their students have to know away. A nation doesn't actually know what is really happening in classes. If a teacher in low-income district and a teacher in high-income district have to teach the same things at the same speed only to follow the curriculum, it will be harmful to the quality of classes, since students in different schools have different backgrounds and getting different amount of educational support from their family. Because different schools have different students, teachers will know better than the nation regarding what to teach to their students at what speed.
In conclusion, requiring all students in a nation to follow the same national curriculum might have positive effects as making students have similar amount of knowledge through schools, but it will limit what perspective to learn in schools, and it will harm teachers' own choices of what to teach in classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 325.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19692307692 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78106190608 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473846153846 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.7557234743 60.3974514979 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.75 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0833333333 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170825915432 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759071365551 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326491448809 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12028507846 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301553929116 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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